Building Tension

Like a brick-by-brick castle unfolding. with scaffolding
Petals after petals of distress go on unfolding.
Feelings of hurt, ache, uncertainty, and anxiety
Like rust in iron, it pokes and corrodes my gaiety.

Is it my physique, which is ill within, that causes pain?
Is my psyche, like a parched, cracked earth, screaming to be sane?
Like a termite-eating piece of art, I crush and crumble.
On the rocks of my sadness and loneliness, I stumble.

Is my blood boiling like water at 100 degrees Celsius?
My fear, anger, and pessimism make me nefarious.
My unmet needs, relational plights, and suppressed powers
Have grown in my orchard of hearts, like cannabis flowers.

I should come out of tension, like chicks out of shredded shells.
I should, like a lotus, raise my head from these marshy wells.
I should allow the graces of the sole spirit to flow.
Like the lilies of wild fields, by divine glows, I must grow.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Ibeh Avatar
March 4, 2024 at 8:53 AM
Heartiest congratulations on your podium win in my contest with this beautifully composed poem, Christuraj:-) I thoroughly enjoyed the read!
Pandit Avatar
March 2, 2024 at 6:07 AM
I should, like a lotus, raise my head from these marshy wells--so inspiring, well said! BIG congrats on your win, Christuraj.
Alex Avatar
March 2, 2024 at 7:09 PM
Thank you very much. May God Bless You!
George Avatar
March 2, 2024 at 3:11 AM
Life can be tempestuous sometimes and we get plunged into the nadir of despair. But nothing is out of redemption. There is grace that can save us. Your concluding stanza is so inspirational dear Chris. It gives hope to many tottering in fear and frustration."I should come out of tension, like chicks out of shredded shells. I should, like a lotus, raise my head from these marshy wells. I should allow the graces of the sole spirit to flow. Like the lilies of wild fields, by divine glows, I must grow.". Congratulations on your well-deserved win, dear friend
Alex Avatar
March 2, 2024 at 7:08 PM
Thank you very much. May God Bless You!
Alex Avatar
March 1, 2024 at 9:39 PM
Thank you very much. May God Bless You!
Volumes Avatar
March 1, 2024 at 9:14 PM
like chicks out of shredded shells.......... like a lotus, raise my head from these marshy wells........................... I should allow the graces of the sole spirit to flow. The release of tension after you so eloquently built it up, in your poem ! A shear delight to read. ! Congratulations.
Alex Avatar
March 2, 2024 at 7:07 PM
Thank you very much. May God Bless You!
Goldsmith Avatar
March 1, 2024 at 8:27 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Building Tension" write. What a great ending... Have a great/blessed day with your win.....................
Alex Avatar
March 1, 2024 at 8:12 PM
Thank you very much. May God Bless You!
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