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Broken Monoku

weeping willow on the river - who feeds who 11~28~2014 It's my birthday - dice rolled Contest: One Broken Monoku Sponsor: Rick Parise

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/12/2015 12:09:00 AM

Amazing monoku, I like how you end the line. Who feeds who? Linda

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/12/2015 12:09:00 AM

PSSSSS... where are you???

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 4/9/2015 8:07:00 PM

This monoku is gentle...extravagant..I love a line that leaves one thinking... I imagine the long drooping branches sinking in the depths of cool waters...they feed each other no doubt...this is what we do here on this site... feed each other our mind's beauty, experience and imagination. Another brilliant verse.

Paul Callus

Date: 12/2/2014 11:31:00 AM

Hi Maurice! Looks like I missed out on another Monoku...my fault, should have visited earlier! Also, belated birthday wishes...you're still younger than I am:) Excellent monoku; weeping willows give that something extra to any poem...the second line is food for thought. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/1/2014 3:37:00 PM

by the way, I think I actually like the first one better!! It makes us come by ourselves to that conclusion you give us in the second one!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/1/2014 3:34:00 PM

Well, you asked my opinion so here it is. They are both good, but my understanding of how he describes the form, you can't make opinions or draw conclusions about what you are "showing" us. In other words, you just paint the picture.Also, I think you will do yourself a disfavor by giving an alternate, my friend. I think the judges do not want to see poets doing that when they ask for only one. Love what you said about your birthday. Trying to get that brownie point. heehee. you GO, Maurice!!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 11/29/2014 10:05:00 PM

This says so much Maurice.Excellent dear friend!Charma

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 11/29/2014 9:53:00 PM

this a wowwoowow! very witty!

Sandra Haight

Date: 11/29/2014 6:51:00 PM

Wow! Very clever, Maurice!....And, Happy Belated Birthday! Sandra

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/28/2014 10:14:00 PM

Well you got me here Maurice, I wasn't expecting this, brilliant, loved it. A side note, you know the band "April Wine" if you do, you will know why this poem made me ask!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/28/2014 8:26:00 PM

wow, this small one makes a profound statement, Maurice. VERY well done for your broken monoku. I sure hope I can come up with something.

David Mohn

Date: 11/28/2014 8:05:00 PM

Terrific Maurice...happy birthday as well!

Jan Allison

Date: 11/28/2014 6:31:00 PM

This is so so clever Maurice- good luck in the contest my friend:-) hugs Jan xx