Vijay Pandit Poet Free verse

Broken Hearts

How pitiful of me
To carry your heart
In my own
When I know it beats
A somber tone

How credulous of you
To speak to heavens
So lovingly about us
Urging for my return

As footsteps we heard
Walked past each other

And not a hint of love
Exchanged a look

Perhaps it's best 
How clueless we are--
Unprepared to mend
Two broken hearts

December 19, 2018
Placed first in contest #530 by Brian Strand

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Allen Beilschmidt Sr. March 27, 2019 at 12:09 PM Congats on your win. Very sad and universal.

Connie Marcum Wong December 23, 2018 at 8:46 PM Congratulations on your deserving win with this romantic yet sad poem Vijay. Blessings this holiday season! : ) xxoo Vijay Pandit December 25, 2018 at 7:26 AM Thank you Connie. Merry Christmas!

Nette Onclaud December 23, 2018 at 1:57 PM happy sunday, vijay!...huggs Vijay Pandit December 23, 2018 at 3:23 PM Thank you, nette.

Wren Rushing December 23, 2018 at 1:41 PM Congrats on your win on this beautiful poem. Have a happy holiday season my dear friend. Vijay Pandit December 23, 2018 at 3:23 PM Thank you Wren..appreciate the visit and kind words.

Andrea Dietrich December 23, 2018 at 9:25 AM OH, Vijay, I just saw your reply to me. Did you listen to the song's melody? I just love it. Anyway, I see you got a number one with this . WAY TO GO. Congratulations. Vijay Pandit December 23, 2018 at 10:25 AM Yes I listened to the melody..one of a kind! Thanks, Andrea.

Nette Onclaud December 23, 2018 at 2:25 AM we won, vijay... sweet congrats and have a diwali kind of a holyday, dear friend!... huggs Vijay Pandit December 23, 2018 at 7:35 AM Thank you nette..appreciate the return visit. And thanks for the holiday wishes.

Brandy Nicole December 22, 2018 at 10:37 PM Congratulations Vijay, on this win. May your heart always be whole. ~ Brandy Vijay Pandit December 23, 2018 at 7:33 AM Thank you Brandy..appreciate the return visit.

Carolyn Devonshire December 22, 2018 at 10:24 PM Stopping back to offer congratulations for your win in Brian's contest, Vijay. I hope you are enjoying a great weekend. Hugs, Carolyn Vijay Pandit December 23, 2018 at 7:33 AM Thank you Carolyn..appreciate the return visit.

Richard Lamoureux December 22, 2018 at 6:10 PM Congrats on your deserved placement. Merry Christmas. Vijay Pandit December 23, 2018 at 7:32 AM Thank you Richard.

Funom Makama December 22, 2018 at 8:32 AM beautiful, passionate but sad... Broken hearts shatter to hopelessness but when they pick up the pieces, it becomes a miracle... Merry christmas and happy new year.. Vijay Pandit December 23, 2018 at 7:32 AM Thank you Funom..Merry Christmas to you as well.

Andrea Dietrich December 21, 2018 at 7:47 PM Takes me back to the 70's and "how do you mend a broken heart" I really like this one, Vijay. Vijay Pandit December 22, 2018 at 7:26 AM Thank you Andrea..just read the lyrics to the song you refer to..nicely done.

Carolyn Devonshire December 21, 2018 at 1:14 PM Passing by one who has hurt you and seeing "not a hint of love" is so chilling, Vijay. Many have experienced this feeling and you describe it perfectly. It's so sad when broken hearts cannot be mended. Beautifully penned, my friend. Best wishes for happy holidays, Carolyn Vijay Pandit December 22, 2018 at 7:27 AM Happy holidays to you as well, Carolyn. Many thanks for the kind words.

Mystic Rose Rose December 21, 2018 at 6:30 AM May your heart never be broken dear poet. Wishing you a Merry Christmas full of love, peace and health. Also, thank you for always commenting on my poems. Love xo Vijay Pandit December 22, 2018 at 7:28 AM Thank you Pixie..appreciate your visit and comments.

CayCay Godwin December 20, 2018 at 1:57 PM Oh, this hits me hard, I felt each word as I have lived these words. How well you captured the intensely sad feel of quietly living together while each internally struggles with their own level of 'lost.' Excellent work, Vijay, that saddens me, just as it should. Poetry hugs ... CayCay Vijay Pandit December 20, 2018 at 3:05 PM Thank you for spending the time to write a detailed comment..much appreciated. Many thanks CayCay, for your visit.

Janice Canerdy December 20, 2018 at 12:50 PM Oh, this is so sad, Vijay--but realistic and well-written. Janice Vijay Pandit December 20, 2018 at 3:02 PM Thank you Janice..appreciate your visit and comments.

Vladislav Raven December 20, 2018 at 10:26 AM Hi Vijay, once more your emotional poetry does bring forth my emotions. You have created such a sad write that touches the reader's emotions deeply. A deep poem my friend. Sometimes the heart cannot fulfill its dreams. Have a wonderful Christmas season my friend. Have a wonderful Wednesday. Your friend always....Mike. Vijay Pandit December 20, 2018 at 3:02 PM Thank you my friend..appreciate your kind feedback, as always. Merry Christmas to you as well, Mike.

Anne-Lise Andresen December 20, 2018 at 7:38 AM - A beautiful and touching poem, Vijay :) - I wish you a peaceful and beautiful Christmas :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Vijay Pandit December 20, 2018 at 8:14 AM Merry Christmas to you Anne-Lise! Many thanks for the visit and kind feedback..appreciate as always.

Kudzai Mhangwa December 20, 2018 at 12:36 AM So heart breaking, you wrote this poem in a way I've never read a poem about lost love. Great work! Vijay Pandit December 20, 2018 at 8:13 AM Haven't seen you in a while on Soup Kudzai. Many thanks Kudzai..appreciate your kind remarks.

Alexis Y. December 19, 2018 at 11:08 PM Hi Vijay, I agree with Paul, sometimes it's just not meant to be. I've never seen a poem about heartbreak penned quite like this. Well done:-) Alexis Vijay Pandit December 20, 2018 at 8:12 AM Thank you for the generous feedback. Appreciate your visit, as always.

Kim Rodrigues December 19, 2018 at 8:54 PM Love the opening lines! It may be pitiful but sounds like love. We can hope those hearts will mend! Vijay Pandit December 20, 2018 at 8:11 AM Thank you Kim. Appreciate your visit and kind remarks.

Brandy Nicole December 19, 2018 at 4:58 PM Once a heart has been broken, pieces cannot be perfectly placed, making it whole again. However- in time, a heart will heal around the broken moments. It hurts sometimes, when you leave your heart open- and love is not received in return. Both are feeling lost it seems. Your thoughts hold many emotions. This is beautiful and tender. ~ Brandy Vijay Pandit December 20, 2018 at 8:11 AM You analysis is on mark..many thanks Brandy. Always appreciate your visit and delightful comments.

Besma Riabi Dziri December 19, 2018 at 3:00 PM With every beauty you fashion, there is a distinctive scent.. a new feeling.. a gripping treat.. You have genuinely looked inside a mind, a heart and a soul in a state of a broken heart.. you wonderfully convey a unique taste of human nature dipping it into the beauty of your poetic prowess.. Always a great pleasure to read your fine work of art dear Vijay.. Best regards. Stay blessed always. Vijay Pandit December 19, 2018 at 3:34 PM I am always happy to read your generous response, Besma. So kind of you to take the time to offer a detailed feedback. Many thanks for your visit, as always. Regards.

Nette Onclaud December 19, 2018 at 1:26 PM what a throbbing piece which languidly speaks of a heartbreak...splendid in its poetic mood, vijay... huggs Vijay Pandit December 19, 2018 at 2:41 PM Thank you, nette. Appreciate the kind feedback.

M. L. Kiser December 19, 2018 at 11:53 AM Sometimes it happens; emotions can make the difference, especially when evoked without thought of one another. Well done. Vijay Pandit December 19, 2018 at 2:40 PM You said it well..your feedback is much appreciated..many thanks MLK.

Lawrence Sharp December 19, 2018 at 11:22 AM Expressed with a brief but very mournful and emotive depth. Excellent writing, Vijay. Vijay Pandit December 19, 2018 at 2:39 PM Thank you Lawrence..appreciate the kind remarks.

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