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Broken Hearts

How pitiful of me To carry your heart In my own When I know it beats A somber tone How credulous of you To speak to heavens So lovingly about us Urging for my return As footsteps we heard Walked past each other And not a hint of love Exchanged a look Perhaps it's best How clueless we are-- Unprepared to mend Two broken hearts December 19, 2018 Placed first in contest #530 by Brian Strand

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Allen Beilschmidt Sr.

Date: 3/27/2019 12:09:00 PM

Congats on your win. Very sad and universal.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/23/2018 8:46:00 PM

Congratulations on your deserving win with this romantic yet sad poem Vijay. Blessings this holiday season! : ) xxoo

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/25/2018 7:26:00 AM

Thank you Connie. Merry Christmas!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 12/23/2018 1:57:00 PM

happy sunday, vijay!...huggs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/23/2018 3:23:00 PM

Thank you, nette.

Wren Rushing

Date: 12/23/2018 1:41:00 PM

Congrats on your win on this beautiful poem. Have a happy holiday season my dear friend.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/23/2018 3:23:00 PM

Thank you Wren..appreciate the visit and kind words.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/23/2018 9:25:00 AM

OH, Vijay, I just saw your reply to me. Did you listen to the song's melody? I just love it. Anyway, I see you got a number one with this . WAY TO GO. Congratulations.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/23/2018 10:25:00 AM

Yes I listened to the melody..one of a kind! Thanks, Andrea.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 12/23/2018 2:25:00 AM

we won, vijay... sweet congrats and have a diwali kind of a holyday, dear friend!... huggs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/23/2018 7:35:00 AM

Thank you nette..appreciate the return visit. And thanks for the holiday wishes.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 12/22/2018 10:37:00 PM

Congratulations Vijay, on this win. May your heart always be whole. ~ Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/23/2018 7:33:00 AM

Thank you Brandy..appreciate the return visit.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/22/2018 10:24:00 PM

Stopping back to offer congratulations for your win in Brian's contest, Vijay. I hope you are enjoying a great weekend. Hugs, Carolyn

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/23/2018 7:33:00 AM

Thank you Carolyn..appreciate the return visit.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/22/2018 6:10:00 PM

Congrats on your deserved placement. Merry Christmas.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/23/2018 7:32:00 AM

Thank you Richard.

Funom Makama

Date: 12/22/2018 8:32:00 AM

beautiful, passionate but sad... Broken hearts shatter to hopelessness but when they pick up the pieces, it becomes a miracle... Merry christmas and happy new year..

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/23/2018 7:32:00 AM

Thank you Funom..Merry Christmas to you as well.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/21/2018 7:47:00 PM

Takes me back to the 70's and "how do you mend a broken heart" I really like this one, Vijay.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/22/2018 7:26:00 AM

Thank you Andrea..just read the lyrics to the song you refer to..nicely done.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/21/2018 1:14:00 PM

Passing by one who has hurt you and seeing "not a hint of love" is so chilling, Vijay. Many have experienced this feeling and you describe it perfectly. It's so sad when broken hearts cannot be mended. Beautifully penned, my friend. Best wishes for happy holidays, Carolyn

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/22/2018 7:27:00 AM

Happy holidays to you as well, Carolyn. Many thanks for the kind words.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 12/21/2018 6:30:00 AM

May your heart never be broken dear poet. Wishing you a Merry Christmas full of love, peace and health. Also, thank you for always commenting on my poems. Love xo

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/22/2018 7:28:00 AM

Thank you Pixie..appreciate your visit and comments.

Caycay Jennings

Date: 12/20/2018 1:57:00 PM

Oh, this hits me hard, I felt each word as I have lived these words. How well you captured the intensely sad feel of quietly living together while each internally struggles with their own level of 'lost.' Excellent work, Vijay, that saddens me, just as it should. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/20/2018 3:05:00 PM

Thank you for spending the time to write a detailed comment..much appreciated. Many thanks CayCay, for your visit.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 12/20/2018 12:50:00 PM

Oh, this is so sad, Vijay--but realistic and well-written. Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/20/2018 3:02:00 PM

Thank you Janice..appreciate your visit and comments.

Vladislav Raven

Date: 12/20/2018 10:26:00 AM

Hi Vijay, once more your emotional poetry does bring forth my emotions. You have created such a sad write that touches the reader's emotions deeply. A deep poem my friend. Sometimes the heart cannot fulfill its dreams. Have a wonderful Christmas season my friend. Have a wonderful Wednesday. Your friend always....Mike.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/20/2018 3:02:00 PM

Thank you my friend..appreciate your kind feedback, as always. Merry Christmas to you as well, Mike.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 12/20/2018 7:38:00 AM

- A beautiful and touching poem, Vijay :) - I wish you a peaceful and beautiful Christmas :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/20/2018 8:14:00 AM

Merry Christmas to you Anne-Lise! Many thanks for the visit and kind feedback..appreciate as always.

Kudzai Mhangwa

Date: 12/20/2018 12:36:00 AM

So heart breaking, you wrote this poem in a way I've never read a poem about lost love. Great work!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/20/2018 8:13:00 AM

Haven't seen you in a while on Soup Kudzai. Many thanks Kudzai..appreciate your kind remarks.

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/19/2018 11:08:00 PM

Hi Vijay, I agree with Paul, sometimes it's just not meant to be. I've never seen a poem about heartbreak penned quite like this. Well done:-) Alexis

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/20/2018 8:12:00 AM

Thank you for the generous feedback. Appreciate your visit, as always.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 12/19/2018 8:54:00 PM

Love the opening lines! It may be pitiful but sounds like love. We can hope those hearts will mend!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/20/2018 8:11:00 AM

Thank you Kim. Appreciate your visit and kind remarks.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 12/19/2018 4:58:00 PM

Once a heart has been broken, pieces cannot be perfectly placed, making it whole again. However- in time, a heart will heal around the broken moments. It hurts sometimes, when you leave your heart open- and love is not received in return. Both are feeling lost it seems. Your thoughts hold many emotions. This is beautiful and tender. ~ Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/20/2018 8:11:00 AM

You analysis is on mark..many thanks Brandy. Always appreciate your visit and delightful comments.

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 12/19/2018 3:00:00 PM

With every beauty you fashion, there is a distinctive scent.. a new feeling.. a gripping treat.. You have genuinely looked inside a mind, a heart and a soul in a state of a broken heart.. you wonderfully convey a unique taste of human nature dipping it into the beauty of your poetic prowess.. Always a great pleasure to read your fine work of art dear Vijay.. Best regards. Stay blessed always.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/19/2018 3:34:00 PM

I am always happy to read your generous response, Besma. So kind of you to take the time to offer a detailed feedback. Many thanks for your visit, as always. Regards.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 12/19/2018 1:26:00 PM

what a throbbing piece which languidly speaks of a heartbreak...splendid in its poetic mood, vijay... huggs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/19/2018 2:41:00 PM

Thank you, nette. Appreciate the kind feedback.