Broken Heart

Falling apart when the mind doesnt 
stand still,
Holding yourself to the last 
remaining grip,
Telling yourself to stay strong, 
nothing is impossible,
But your hands feel heavy no more,
Your legs feel just so light,
Falling away from the heavenly light,
Sinking into the drop dead night,
Wish I could hold you for the one 
last time,
But its too late, its time to say 
goodbye.
Never thought a day would come,
But it has now already passed by.
Hope I could see you in my next life,
So that I could hold you in my arms 
and just melt away...
Just to make you mine.
A~D

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 9/14/2013 7:08:00 PM
Hi Allen, , CONGRATULATIONS, on having your poem FEATURED on the soups Home Page:-). Good-Night **Linda**
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Date: 9/15/2013 12:05:00 AM
Thank you Linda...have a good night. :) A~D
Date: 9/12/2013 7:27:00 PM
Congrats on your poem being featured this week, Allen
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Date: 9/13/2013 2:31:00 PM
Thank you doc... :) A~D
Date: 9/11/2013 1:04:00 AM
wow beautiful words scribed poetically,,, i loved reading each line,,,, as i was reading through i was taken to a trip of your hurts which took me to mine as well.... nyc one
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Date: 9/13/2013 2:28:00 PM
Thank you Patrick for the review.... :) A~D
Date: 8/29/2013 8:40:00 AM
I could feel your pain and wistfulness in this heartfelt write. Well done! A warm welcome to the soup. Hugs
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Date: 8/31/2013 4:39:00 PM
Thank you for the review Cecilia..... :) A~D
Date: 8/27/2013 2:42:00 PM
oh my, what a sad and tender poem this is. I love how you made us FEEL and not just tell us your pain!
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Date: 8/27/2013 11:28:00 PM
Thank you Andrea. Good to know you could understand the feeling :) A~D
Date: 8/27/2013 2:41:00 PM
Hi, Allen. Nice to meet you. I am not a hardcore fan of the Star Trek show, but i did watch it back in the day!! I was a bigger fan of Boston Legal, which Shatner appeared in as a much older guy! Now let me see your poem here.
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Date: 8/27/2013 11:28:00 PM
Yaa please do look into it... A~D
Date: 8/27/2013 8:20:00 AM
Love that idea of eternity - "melting away." Good to know you. Thanks for reading my stuff. daver
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Date: 8/27/2013 12:04:00 AM
nicely done ;}
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Date: 8/27/2013 11:29:00 PM
Thank you Debbie :) A~D
Date: 8/26/2013 6:12:00 PM
Nice write Allen. The first line really brought me into the poem and the rest was excellent as well. Looking forward to hearing more from you. Well done.~Kilmer
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Date: 8/27/2013 11:30:00 PM
Thank you Kilmer for the support. Inspires me to write more :) A~D
Date: 8/26/2013 6:38:00 AM
"Hope I could see you in my next life" ... that is a line that really conveys a deep love and yearning. Well done
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Date: 8/26/2013 7:54:00 AM
Yes it sure does mean that. Thank you for the support. :) A~D
Date: 8/24/2013 10:38:00 AM
"Sinking into the drop dead night"- beautiful and clever verse that I wish I had penned. You are expressing a universal, and I love when a poet does that. This is a cool piece and I very much enjoyed the read. Kudos! :)
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Date: 8/25/2013 10:28:00 PM
Lol..thats fine.....anyway you guys encourage me to write more....have a great day.. :) A~D
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Date: 8/24/2013 10:39:00 AM
should say *universal sentiment lol I've been drinking this morning; sorry
Date: 8/24/2013 4:14:00 AM
GOOD JOBBB./#$$#
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Allen Danie
Date: 8/24/2013 4:37:00 AM
thanx man.... :)
Date: 8/24/2013 1:51:00 AM
pavam chakkan :P
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Date: 8/24/2013 4:36:00 AM
poda poda.... :)
Date: 8/12/2013 8:46:00 AM
sad but good write.
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Date: 8/14/2013 1:48:00 PM
Thank you kenisha :)
Date: 8/10/2013 3:04:00 PM
- Really well written, Allen. - Have a great weekend! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/12/2013 7:50:00 AM
Thank you...You too have a wonderful weekend :)
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