Broken and Bowed

timber ~ echoes loud silent treetop in the clouds crashes from its shroud By David Kavanagh

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Gary Radice

Date: 3/19/2021 1:57:00 PM

This sadly hits hard. Another great Haiku David.

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/19/2021 2:10:00 PM

Thanks Gary, sad indeed took a little while to figure out, but I’m glad I stuck at it, cheers David

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/19/2021 1:04:00 PM

- ... really "broken and bowed", David - If it's for contest, I wish you good luck :) - // Anne-Lise :)

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 3/19/2021 2:38:00 PM

- "One NEW Non-Traditonal Haiku in seventeen syllables or less" ... Of course you can use this

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/19/2021 1:10:00 PM

Thanks Anne-Lise, I only noticed Constance’s contest after writing this, This one’s syllable count is 5/7/5 so wouldn’t qualify, better get my thinking cap on again, cheers David

Jan Allison

Date: 3/19/2021 12:36:00 PM

a sad scene indeed David, hugs Jan xx

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/19/2021 12:38:00 PM

Thanks Jan, I actually felt sad writing it, cheers David