Broken

I am torn I am shattered I am bound and broken Heavy shackles on my feet --Chains in my heart! I can't move I can't breathe The world closes in Darkness encloses me in its thick blankets. My heart so somber, --Beats so loudly I fear it will burst! Tears fill my eyes and blind my way, I can't move I can't see I can't feel I am blind I am deaf I am numb I am a slave My wings broken, my spirit crushed I am dead, he is gone I am alone and cold Now, I fear I will never be whole again. By; MARY

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/6/2015 8:02:00 PM

Thank you, YOU ARE AWESOME:)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/6/2015 5:17:00 PM

about your poem: WOW, this is heavy and deep. To carry a weight brought on by others. I love everything about this poem, from blind to death. That's how I felt 8 months ago. I'm adding this poem to my favorite poem list. I don't come across poetry like this. It's up my alley. If you don't mind I think you should change the form to Free Verse or Verse, perhaps you like EPIC much better. I'd recommend AWESOME, but LOL, we don't' have the form. soup mail

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/6/2015 5:05:00 PM

Hello, Mary, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry when you are ready :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy 2015, with New Poet Friends @-> LINDA <-@

Brittany Larson

Date: 4/6/2015 8:51:00 AM

A very sad write. I enjoyed it though, as I feel poem should evoke emotion and I feel this one does. Welcome to the Soup. ~Much love, Brittany