Broken

No comfort today
even my walk outside
did nothing to dispel the
roiling clouds of discontent (helplessness)
within my mind

The fight within my spirit is gone-
broken- run away- hiding
too much, too long
the breaking point-silent as falling snow
weeping endlessly - helplessly 
is all that follows

Will I lay here forever
weeping in madness
or will my strength return
once the river of tears
has run it’s course?

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 11/12/2009 8:33:00 AM
I think "Broken" is the theme of my life. We are of similar emotional feeling
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Date: 10/6/2009 4:33:00 PM
very sad, hope you are well, I like to think like Scarlet o hara- i will think about that tomorrow. and let the sorrow go today.
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Date: 10/1/2009 7:47:00 PM
i find this a sad ..good write..................kate
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Date: 9/29/2009 2:03:00 PM
Trudy, I read your blog and want you to know we are all here for you. This "river of tears" will eventually run its course! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/27/2009 7:05:00 PM
very sad, nicely penned
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Date: 9/25/2009 7:33:00 AM
This is somethign I know I can relate to. I believe you will move on it just takes time...Wishing you the best and hoping that the grey clouds leave you soon.....The Southern Belle
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Date: 9/21/2009 1:49:00 PM
Heartfelt write Trudy, you will be you again>>James
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Date: 9/21/2009 12:12:00 PM
sentiments many can understand.very heart rendering poem...i remember laying down, wonderifn if ever there was any point gertting up...grrthx
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Date: 9/21/2009 3:29:00 AM
very nice and expressive ... sad and painful ...nice write.. bless you. love Mili
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Date: 9/20/2009 1:22:00 PM
Be sure and let the mourning run it course, for there is healing in it's wings, always. Sincerely Moses
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Date: 9/20/2009 10:21:00 AM
Keep the faith, Trudy. I have been in the state you describe, but we do find our strength again. Your spirit will return; I'm certain of it. And you'll be in my prayers. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/20/2009 10:08:00 AM
You have expressed so eloquently those feelings of despair that seem to have no end....and yet, somehow that veil of darkness will lift eventually, and the sun will shine again.... I hope it does quickly for you, if this comes from your heart today. ~ Love, Carrie
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Date: 9/20/2009 10:05:00 AM
Hi Trudy Ah, so sad but real....I think we're on same wave length today. Beautifully written I savored every word. Take care Love Light Truth Patricia
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