Broken

What are you to me? A smiling memory, A heartache in a jar, A strong and mad elixir I dared to drink The taste is bitter now, But I can still remember How sweet it was On your lips And on mine Sleeping seraph Whose heart I held Closer than you knew, Was it in vain What we exchanged— A friendship for a broken love?

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Ashley Yates

Date: 10/27/2009 10:50:00 PM

Broken hearts are such a painful sorrow... I am sorry for your loss, very nice write!

Jessica K

Date: 5/28/2009 7:32:00 PM

So sad, very creative the way you have written this piece....I love it -Jessica

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/19/2009 9:36:00 PM

Nick, "A heartache in a jar" is such a great metaphor. Sometimes lovers come and go; true friends are hard to find. Check out "Blizzard" and you'll see what I mean about the importance of friendship. And you're not "Ruff" at all, sweet one. Love, Carolyn

Tyesha Ehigiator

Date: 2/17/2009 6:06:00 PM

Beautifully written but very sad. Sometimes it is better to remain friends and be happy than to cross that line where nothing will ever be the same and risk losing them..Wonderful imagery portrayed here, Nicely done..God Bless*Tyesha

Aleera De La Keur

Date: 2/17/2009 3:38:00 PM

I loved this, really. It makes me think of my soon to be ex husband, sadly. Great write .....Aleera