Kabuteng P.Ink K. Poet Free verse

Breathing In Chaos

the crickets break the silence
of the still, dark night

the leaves stir in hushed waves
as the wind whispers past

the moon hides…
shy behind her veiled curtain,

she lets tears flow instead

no crickets chirp
the leaves weep 
as the winds wail

and I—

I breathe in the chaos,
feel the cold 
dampen the world 
around me

but my spirit 
for some reason
is refreshed

I guess
nature also needs to vent




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Gwendolen Song May 26, 2011 at 2:15 PM Hi Nikko- Of course, nature does have to vent. You are absoltuely right..I never really thot about personifying nature in such a way as you have in this poem...I love it! Especially your free verse form...it's broken up in a way that allows the reader natural pauses after each thought... Lovely, Nikko. When does your book come out? :) Gwendolen

Skat A May 26, 2011 at 7:30 AM I love the joy and turmoil of fresh air~luv*SKAT

Carolyn Devonshire May 21, 2011 at 1:18 PM Hey, Nikko, thanks for your comment. I just lost 18 pounds but my body doesn't seem to want to go any further. Still want to lost at least 7 more pounds. Love from the elephant lady (And, drat, now you've got me missing my mom's apple pie. When will my care package arrive? LOL)

Carolyn Devonshire May 15, 2011 at 5:23 AM Just wanted to ssay I'm glad you're enjoying new activities, Nikko. I need a break too. I'll try and be as productive as you. You're an inspiration. Love, Carolyn

Linda-Marie Sweetheart May 13, 2011 at 8:38 PM thankxx for your sweet comments sweet Nikko friend .. hope u will enjoy a very happy weekend luv.. we are so relaxing ... much needed .. much desired... soon our home.. in a year or two luv..

Poet Destroyer A May 13, 2011 at 7:53 AM i have an awesome way of thinking that pushing a baby in to this wolrd is chotic for the baby,,,lol once it takes its first breath its breathing in chaos..lol... gosh i have a wild imagination,, accck! <-- lol. (h) But you are right,, the essence that nature need to vent comes from the wothless way we treat the world,,, this is one awesome poem,,, i like it,,,p.d.

De R May 12, 2011 at 12:26 PM Wow, nikko, this is beyond amazing! I could really feel it as I read it. I loved the premise, well, I loved every line! Definitely into my favs:) Hugs to you, Emilia

Wilma Neels May 11, 2011 at 6:02 AM You guessed right Missy, somehow she tends to do it when we least expect it.. That is what makes her so beautiful.. She brings chaos but she also reminds us humans that we need each other to survive.. okay that's my two cents :) Really, really enjoyed this write of yours *hugs* Kabuteng P.Ink K. May 11, 2011 at 9:50 AM I think your two cents is very valuable missy ;) so hmm not just two cents ok? more like priceless ;) glad you enjoyed this one :) hugs back to you :)

Gwendolen Song May 11, 2011 at 3:10 AM Is" this your 229th poem? Neat!! Yes, I like the fact that nature now has the need to vent..of course it does! It has feelings too! Awesome...and unlike your other listings! Gwendolen Kabuteng P.Ink K. May 11, 2011 at 9:47 AM eep? not sure how many poems I have here now? Thanks so much Gwendolen :) yup venting sure can do wonders! :D

Kash Poet May 10, 2011 at 9:08 PM A deep write from you nikko.liked the way you described the moon is covered by the clouds--Enjoyed... Kabuteng P.Ink K. May 10, 2011 at 10:04 PM Thank you, glad you enjoyed it-- Kashinath :)-- haha I just discovered this reply to thing today...

Andrea Dietrich May 10, 2011 at 6:18 PM wow, Nikko. Another one from you that is stunning. I love when you write this way. WAs this for a contest??? soupmail Kabuteng P.Ink K. May 10, 2011 at 10:07 PM hi there sweetie :) you made me smile so much with what you say here-- :) nope not for a contest, just got inspired by the crickets, lol those & that we had strong rains here last Sunday and that got me thinking-- will reply to soupmail in a bit... hugs to you-- oh shucks this reply to thing is gonna get addictive --uh-oh!!!

James Peranteau May 10, 2011 at 5:39 PM My dear poet...you have that gift Nikko, to enlighten our, even gloomiest of day, and cause our comments to explode with joy ! Again my friend, you have given this poet reason to cogratulate you profound desire to please us here on the Soup ! ty love...have a wonderful weekend ful of inspiring writes my dear friend ! much love, james Kabuteng P.Ink K. May 10, 2011 at 10:16 PM Thank you so much James for your very inspiring comments-- when I read this, it makes me realize why i also love to write, thank you for -- continue writing your gems & enjoy your week! :)

Carolyn Devonshire May 10, 2011 at 4:06 PM Love the way you elude to rain by describing the moon hiding behind a curtain and letting teardrops fall, Nikko. Indeed, Nature does need to vent! And sometimes we see consequences like Japan is experiencing. Here I am dieting and you're describing making foods I love. You must be a great cook! Love and blessings in your new endeavors, Carolyn Kabuteng P.Ink K. May 10, 2011 at 10:19 PM Yes, just imagine if Nature couldn't vent... and I think all the more so since she has been burdened so much...haha oops, sorry about that! So nope, i will not mention food anymore-- but oh shucks, I was seriously considering writing a blog about food-- lol, hmm well we can just read and look and not eat :) lol

Dr.Ram Mehta May 10, 2011 at 1:56 PM Deep and meaningful expressions analogical with nature, nikko Kabuteng P.Ink K. May 10, 2011 at 10:26 PM Thank you very much, Dr. Ram :) I enjoyed writing this one :)