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Breathe Open Form

Let's meet 
     on 
        side
        of
      honesty
honor
    & Integrity
           let's 
    never
forget
   consequences 
         of 
   deception, 
     denial
         delay
             distraction
                &death
upon 
   waking
      think 
         of 
          what 
              a 
     precious
            privilege
                 to be alive 
       breathe
     think
   enjoy
& love
               let worry fade
            breathe
         allow
     affection
& premonition

mend 
  your 
    wings
       taste food
            when
               eating
             taste slumber
           when
        sleeping
    be  alive
        will all 
    be dead 
soon enough
  have 
    your 
        head 
            in 
               clouds
               & think
                   you 
               are 
            in 
         paradise
poetry
  is 
     thoughts 
         that 
            breathe, 
               & words
          that 
     burn
beauty
   of
     life
         grow
           from
                soil
              build 
                in 
             steeple
           mold
         into
      art 
 shaped 
      into 
          bread 
              loaves
              or 
          hold it 
        in 
    your
heart 

Written: March 25, 2023

5th place contest winner 

Strand No 1203 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Brian Strand

NOTE::THIS IS AN OPEN(organic) FORM VERSE using spaces&breaks without grammatical symbols ,the ' open' relies upon 'the one breath limitation' (intuitive cadence)& so inherently requires the 'reader' (reciter) to input and responds thus making this enigmatic form a two way interplay & interpretatIon unique to the moment& changing according to mood is inherently variable.

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Sam Kauffman April 5, 2023 at 3:33 PM I love the open form for this poem that floats like flowers on a spring breeze Lasaad -swinging and swaying in a soft, poetic cadence! Not only is the form perfect but your words and images fit perfectly taking us on a rapturous ride! Congratulations on your win! Blessings of Easter joy to you!

Valsa George March 27, 2023 at 10:03 PM A lovely poem ! Such positive and healthy attitude will definitely make our life so blissful and we will be able to walk with our heads in the cloud. Beautiful lay out too. Congratulations on your great win, dear Lasaad

Jennifer Proxenos March 26, 2023 at 7:55 AM A poem with great imagery FANTASIA at its best, and thus i declare this poem one of my favorite of faves - stupendous pic. and awesome poetry. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Vijay Pandit March 26, 2023 at 5:52 AM Endearing thoughts strung together in artistic imagery. A FAVE for the inspiration you convey my friend. Kudos for your mastery over this form.

Stephan McBride March 26, 2023 at 5:50 AM Great wisdom and knowledge within this, love it , style is amazing as well

Demetrios Trifiatis March 26, 2023 at 3:00 AM An adventures form of poetry that uplifts the reader onto the heavens of inspiration, my dearest friend, Lasaad. A unique experience that deserves a FAVE. Blessings.

Fin Chuuk March 25, 2023 at 8:36 PM What an intrigue form. Took you on a ride for a read. Awesome!

Alexis Y. March 25, 2023 at 7:36 PM WoW! Lasaad, I never even heard of this form. However, I think you hit the ball out of the park and scored a home run. I enjoyed this from start to finish. Excellent job. Best wishes in the contest:-) Alexis