David O'Haolin Whalen Poet Rhyme

Breath Upon the Looking Glass

My breath expressed
Upon the looking glass
A living veil 
Composed of gas

Eyes kept without
Breath held within
A visual shout
A ghastly grin

That fades away
As does the breath
As sure and certain
As life and death

The looking glass
Now free of mist
Lays bare my soul
And doing so insists

That I observe
The exposed nerve
That in said glass 
Persists

I hastily breath anew
On said looking glass
To renew said veil 
of living  gas

Then Hie away
Before it fades
And draws me fast (and forever)
Into the looking glass

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Leo Larry Amadore October 24, 2012 at 4:56 PM An interesting and well-written piece...I enjoyed reading it. David O'Haolin Whalen October 28, 2012 at 4:36 PM thanks Leo. I thought this might weird out people, but it's getting a few hits. Maybe it's not so creepy.

Connie Gildersleeve October 24, 2012 at 3:18 PM Very good. Flows well. Thank you for sharing.