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Breakfast In Bed

talons clamp shrews head 
      body parts torn into shreds 
              agog owlets fed


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A STRAND (1068) Poetry Contest
08/02/2022

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Christuraj Alex

Date: 2/8/2022 7:41:00 PM

A very beautiful haiku. Congratulations!

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/9/2022 12:36:00 AM

Thank you Alex, A little brutal but realistic as indeed is nature, cheers David

James Peranteau

Date: 10/19/2021 6:30:00 AM

Let's all see the beauty in this....never mind...just can't find it in me to accept that the owlets can't go get their own food...tortoises do ;)...have a great vinter visit if'n you're into nature that iz....much love, james

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/19/2021 9:00:00 AM

Not much beauty here James, a bit like watching a tortoise trying to swim, yeah feeding the youngsters can be a major drawback in nature, but we're working on it, cheers David

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/18/2021 1:06:00 PM

love the rhyming effect here!!! congrats for the win.

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/18/2021 1:36:00 PM

Thank you Andrea, not traditional, but my mono-rhyme probably does enhance this haiku, cheers David

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 10/18/2021 11:39:00 AM

Kid's fed Sadly some are just food on another's menu And if we don't eat we die Circle of life and death

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/18/2021 12:07:00 PM

Ain't it so Christopher, unless your a supermodel and survive on a glass of water a day, nature does what nature is, and never apologises, cheers David

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 10/18/2021 10:15:00 AM

This is how it is in the wild, survival of the fittest across the length and breadth of the food chain. Congratulations my friend on your deserved win. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/18/2021 10:40:00 AM

Thank you Jennifer, I was delighted to get a mention in the contest, your so right survival of the fittest for the animals, I think it's morphing into survival of the cleverest for mankind, cheers David

Sam Kauffman

Date: 10/18/2021 10:12:00 AM

David, congratulations on your win! This is nature in action grim as it may be. Wonderfully written.

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/18/2021 10:36:00 AM

Thank you so much Sam, nature is beautiful, but there is this brutal trade off to pay, cheers David

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

Date: 10/18/2021 7:52:00 AM

Ah, wonderful haiku! I love the imagery it conjures. Congratulations on your win David! xomo

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/18/2021 8:51:00 AM

My version of the Taming of the shrew, thank you calling by super Mo, cheers David

Paulette Calasibetta

Date: 10/17/2021 1:56:00 PM

Your fascinating imagery paints a realistic picture.....excellent! Good luck in the contest! Blessings, Paulette

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/17/2021 2:21:00 PM

Thank you again Paulette, I got a placement in the contest, for my honest realism, I'm delighted cheers David

Robert James Liguori

Date: 10/17/2021 12:57:00 PM

And such is the reality of the circle of life. Incredible poem, thank you for entering the contest!

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/17/2021 1:13:00 PM

Thank you Robert, I appreciate you stopping by, with such nice words, on my pretty visceral haiku, I'm delighted with the placement and all the comments I received, cheers David

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/17/2021 12:45:00 PM

You've captured the brute force and beauty of Nature with your skilled pen, David. Congratulations for your excellent win in Robert's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/17/2021 1:10:00 PM

Thank you Susan, leave it to me to use the graphic imagery as my inspiration, but I'm delighted when people see it as raw nature at work, cheers David

Jenna Logan

Date: 10/17/2021 3:52:00 AM

Another winner to me that didn’t make the list. Shame. Nicely written, David.

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/17/2021 4:21:00 AM

Morning Jenna, probably too visceral in detail, such is the nature of the beast, like Tom said below, we've all got to eat, but hey I got a mention and some nice comments, cheers David