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Book and Brook

I became enamored with your weakness
My wishes-filled pages of the dream book.
And I hoped you'd link to my brokenness.
I became enamored with your weakness
But it's just your gushing moonlit sadness.
Could ne'er aim to the bottom of this brook.
I became enamored with your weakness
My wishes-filled pages of the dream book.

Written: March 14, 2023

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Bj Legros Kelley Date: 3/20/2023 10:00:00 PM Beautiful poem Sotto. Login to Reply

Valsa George Date: 3/15/2023 10:51:00 PM "My wishes-filled pages of the dream book." Love this line . A beautiful triolet marked with a tinge of melancholy! Login to Reply

Paige Hind Date: 3/15/2023 12:38:00 PM Beautiful...! Login to Reply

Victor Buhagiar Date: 3/15/2023 3:04:00 AM Lovely romantic poem. Login to Reply

Harry Horsman Date: 3/14/2023 4:53:00 PM The brook serves you well, Lasaad, but it has a more powerful side to it, after the rains fall. Hope this poem will enter your dream book, it is so good. Love it. Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 3/14/2023 3:24:00 PM Enjoyed reading your creative work. Thanks for sharing it with us and for dropping by my page. Your comments keep me encouraged. Sara Login to Reply

Hat Bueckert Date: 3/14/2023 1:37:00 PM The "hoped you'd link to my brokenness" got me right in the feels. This is sad and powerful and an excellent example of this form, imho. Adding this to my faves, thanks sir Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/14/2023 1:07:00 PM Interesting to be enamored with weakness but in certain flaws, yes, I can see how this would be so!! Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 3/14/2023 11:17:00 AM - "But it's just your gushing moonlit sadness" a touching and beautiful line, Las :) - hugs Login to Reply

Eve Roper Date: 3/14/2023 10:55:00 AM Lovely write, Lasaad, so soothing and romantic. Hugs Eve Login to Reply