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Blue Moon Shine On Me

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O lonely blue moon, shine a bit for me. I just wander here and there aimlessly. Come dear wan moon, shine brightly so I'll see, Search for my dear one to love faithfully. I just wander here and there aimlessly. She would not tolerate my advances Search for my dear one to love faithfully. She will never accept my mischances. She would not tolerate my advances I was so foolish not to treat her well. She will never accept my mischances. How I miss her, only the Lord can tell. I was so foolish not to treat her well. Come dear wan moon, shine brightly so I'll see, How I miss her, only the Lord can tell. O lonely blue moon, shine a bit for me. Placed 1 14 April 2021 Writing Prompt - Shine - Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France Checked with https://www.howmanysyllables.com/ and https://www.rhymezone.com/

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Beryl Edmonds

Date: 4/23/2021 4:06:00 AM

That’s a beautiful lovelorn Pantoum Victor, congratulations on a well deserved win... Belle

Constance La France

Date: 4/21/2021 4:16:00 PM

Victor, wonderful, congratulations on your placement in my Writing Prompt Shine Challenge with this beautiful Pantoum poem, so well penned, and I like your chosen image too, love _Constance

Victor Buhagiar
Date: 4/21/2021 11:12:00 PM

Thank you. Appreciate your comment.

Sotto Poet

Date: 4/21/2021 1:07:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, dear friend; I think I predicted this one, have a great evening

Sam Kauffman

Date: 4/21/2021 10:52:00 AM

Very heartfelt poem of yearning, Victor. Love the metaphor of the blue moon! It really illustrates the emotion of your words. Congratulations on your win!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/16/2021 8:34:00 PM

Wonderful end rhymes. Advances...mischances

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 4/16/2021 10:29:00 AM

Really touching romantic write dear Victor, the king of romance on poetry soup. Well penned my friend - hope the blue moon will shine a bit for you. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/15/2021 3:47:00 PM

Ahh!! I hope that moon gives you the light to help you build a good relationship. I know just a work for the contest and not real life. Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Your visit to my page was revealing.Sara

Jenna Logan

Date: 4/15/2021 11:50:00 AM

How many lonely hearts have expressed their emotions to the moon. Walks, once taken with a loved one become impossible to tolerate without that hand to hold. It does seem to be a blue moon, and a blue heart that suffers. Beautiful pantoum, Victor

Sotto Poet

Date: 4/15/2021 11:26:00 AM

This is so unique; it's remarkable, Victor Incredibly stunning!", my best wishes of a good luck

Joseph May

Date: 4/15/2021 8:43:00 AM

Very nice Pantoum Victor, best wishews in the Contest..

Supraja Kannan

Date: 4/15/2021 8:31:00 AM

This is so beautiful... Something unique ... "Shine a bit for me", great imagery here... Beautiful!!!

Eve Roper

Date: 4/15/2021 7:18:00 AM

Beautiful Pantoum verse, Victor, it really brought out the imagery and your feelings. Hugs Eve

Joanna Daniel

Date: 4/15/2021 5:49:00 AM

Melancholic, yet alluring, Victor:) all the best:)

Judy Ball

Date: 4/14/2021 11:45:00 PM

A sad and lonely piece my friend. We never realize what we have until we lose it. Great job as always. God Bless, JB

Linda Milgate

Date: 4/14/2021 4:20:00 PM

complex and sad, wonderful to read.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/14/2021 2:03:00 PM

I find this form so difficult to do. What a great job you did using this form. Great work, Victor.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/14/2021 12:55:00 PM

A moving piece that extols that melancholy mood Victor. Beautiful! Blessings xxoo

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 4/14/2021 11:26:00 AM

Your pantoum is romantically sad and beautifully written, Victor. Lovely imagery, especially imagining a person with the blues, under a blue moon. I love the picture, too. Blessings, Evelyn

Sandra Adams

Date: 4/14/2021 10:31:00 AM

The moon and romance always go perfectly together. I like this one I think the repeating lines from this form work beautifully with your thoughts in this one. One can feel the loneliness. Best wishes for a win. Hugs

Alexis Y.

Date: 4/14/2021 9:35:00 AM

Hi Victor, Great take on the contest theme in your well-written write. I found it be sad and hopeful at the same time. May the moon shine at last. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day:-) Alexis

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/14/2021 6:27:00 AM

- A wish so dear ... lovely and touchingly written, Victor - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 4/14/2021 4:41:00 AM

Delightfully rhythmic poem, Victor--especially the opening stanza sets the scene. Much longing and love emanate throughout. Excellent, as always!

Tom Cunningham

Date: 4/14/2021 1:18:00 AM

A lot of soul searching when that happens but sadly that ship has sailed never too return. Tom