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Blue Hole

Alice falls in blue hole dizziness,
bedraggled in white-smocked dress,
bloomers, too-high
knee socks, medusa-spread
of dirty-blond hair. Her nastiness hovers around
the royal-red throne with its pink-flamingo-
legs distress, playing cards
floating in 52-card pickup,
white rose with a heart — indicative of not love,

but trouble to come. wide-eyed Alice,
her tea-water splash — wings
of a Summer-hot butterfly.

Hatter, his static-hair sticks
out of his evergreen hat —
upside-down leprechaun. 
time, too, hangs like bats
...a child, a girl child, inclined
to be trouble. This Alice ruffles
Queen’s undergarments.

Teeny-tiny rabbit,
barely a tic-toc,
scurries under the floating bush.
time plays tricks.
thrice-appears —
third time, he’s very late, indeed.

The Cheshire’s visibles, gleaming white,
polished as if smiling Sunday shoes,
can’t-help-himself grinning
around that impetuous girl,
who was swallowed whole
by Wonderland.

Alice’s world will turn upside-
down, with the hookah lounge’s
increased smoke. Quite high—
creepy caterpillar caterwauls
at the idea of a human
wriggling around its world.

Blue hole dizziness, this world of dreams,
an escape from reality, a nightmare it seems.
There will be giant and teeny-tiny doors, and
potions to explore. She’s much too young.

This is out of character for a young lady. Out
of sight and mind...mindless fun and mayhem,
a child plays her luck. Alice has lost her way.
She grows down...down...down.

Her head above the clouds, likely to lose it.

5/28/2021
Contest: Blue Hole
Sponsor: Anthony Biaanco

*Loosely based on characters from Lewis Carrol’s
Alice’s Adventures in Wonderland
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Edmonds  Avatar
June 9, 2021 at 12:38 AM
A truly enjoyable read about the start of Alice’s adventures in wonderland Kim. Congratulations! this so deserved being on the winners list… Belle
Rodrigues Avatar
June 9, 2021 at 4:17 AM
Thank you, Belle! :)
Leiser Avatar
June 2, 2021 at 6:04 PM
Your unique word statements and superb descriptions really set this poem apart from the rest, Kim. So creative, very fitting with Lewis’s fantastical tale! This Should do well in the contest :)
Rodrigues Avatar
June 2, 2021 at 6:20 PM
Thank you, Laura! :)
Wolf Avatar
June 1, 2021 at 6:09 PM
Love your angle on this one: 'Troubled Alice' is NOT enjoying her journey down that blue hole. That's for sure. Very interesting, gw
Rodrigues Avatar
June 1, 2021 at 8:17 PM
Thank you, Gershon!
Cunningham Avatar
June 1, 2021 at 3:03 PM
Lewis Carrol certainly inspired you Kim, very creative and well written. Best of luck in the contest Tom
Rodrigues Avatar
June 1, 2021 at 8:17 PM
Thank you, Tom! :)
Kavanagh  Avatar
June 1, 2021 at 1:23 PM
Isn’t it great Kim to get lost down the rabbit hole or blue hole, of imagination, you certainly enjoyed writing this piece I can tell, and I certainly enjoyed reading it, should place high, cheers David
Rodrigues Avatar
June 1, 2021 at 8:17 PM
Thanks so much, David! Cheers ~ Kim
De Beaulieu Avatar
June 1, 2021 at 12:07 PM
Hello Kim, I remember this tale as a child. Hugs Darlene.
De Beaulieu Avatar
June 2, 2021 at 10:32 AM
Hello Kim it is a good one. Hugs Darlene
Rodrigues Avatar
June 1, 2021 at 8:16 PM
It is a good one. Hugs ~ Kim
Buhagiar Avatar
June 1, 2021 at 10:11 AM
You managed to make the blue hole very interesting. Great imagination. Hugs.
Rodrigues Avatar
June 1, 2021 at 11:20 AM
Thank you, Victor! Hugs ~ Kim
Hankins Avatar
June 1, 2021 at 9:16 AM
A very creative, scintillating pen on Alice's adventure. Nicely done. Best wishes in the contest, Kim.
Rodrigues Avatar
June 1, 2021 at 11:20 AM
Thank you, Milton! Have a great day!
Trifiatis Avatar
June 1, 2021 at 8:29 AM
The most imaginative representation of a Blue Hole ever, dearest Kim! Excellently written! Good luck! Hugs xxx
Rodrigues Avatar
June 1, 2021 at 9:01 AM
Thank you, my friend! :)
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