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Alice falls in blue hole dizziness, bedraggled in white-smocked dress, bloomers, too-high knee socks, medusa-spread of dirty-blond hair. Her nastiness hovers around the royal-red throne with its pink-flamingo- legs distress, playing cards floating in 52-card pickup, white rose with a heart — indicative of not love, but trouble to come. wide-eyed Alice, her tea-water splash — wings of a Summer-hot butterfly. Hatter, his static-hair sticks out of his evergreen hat — upside-down leprechaun. time, too, hangs like bats ...a child, a girl child, inclined to be trouble. This Alice ruffles Queen’s undergarments. Teeny-tiny rabbit, barely a tic-toc, scurries under the floating bush. time plays tricks. thrice-appears — third time, he’s very late, indeed. The Cheshire’s visibles, gleaming white, polished as if smiling Sunday shoes, can’t-help-himself grinning around that impetuous girl, who was swallowed whole by Wonderland. Alice’s world will turn upside- down, with the hookah lounge’s increased smoke. Quite high— creepy caterpillar caterwauls at the idea of a human wriggling around its world. Blue hole dizziness, this world of dreams, an escape from reality, a nightmare it seems. There will be giant and teeny-tiny doors, and potions to explore. She’s much too young. This is out of character for a young lady. Out of sight and mind...mindless fun and mayhem, a child plays her luck. Alice has lost her way. She grows down...down...down. Her head above the clouds, likely to lose it. 5/28/2021 Contest: Blue Hole Sponsor: Anthony Biaanco *Loosely based on characters from Lewis Carrol’s Alice’s Adventures in Wonderland

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Date: 6/9/2021 12:38:00 AM
A truly enjoyable read about the start of Alice’s adventures in wonderland Kim. Congratulations! this so deserved being on the winners list… Belle
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/9/2021 4:17:00 AM
Thank you, Belle! :)
Date: 6/2/2021 6:04:00 PM
Your unique word statements and superb descriptions really set this poem apart from the rest, Kim. So creative, very fitting with Lewis’s fantastical tale! This Should do well in the contest :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/2/2021 6:20:00 PM
Thank you, Laura! :)
Date: 6/1/2021 6:09:00 PM
Love your angle on this one: 'Troubled Alice' is NOT enjoying her journey down that blue hole. That's for sure. Very interesting, gw
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/1/2021 8:17:00 PM
Thank you, Gershon!
Date: 6/1/2021 3:03:00 PM
Lewis Carrol certainly inspired you Kim, very creative and well written. Best of luck in the contest Tom
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/1/2021 8:17:00 PM
Thank you, Tom! :)
Date: 6/1/2021 1:23:00 PM
Isn’t it great Kim to get lost down the rabbit hole or blue hole, of imagination, you certainly enjoyed writing this piece I can tell, and I certainly enjoyed reading it, should place high, cheers David
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/1/2021 8:17:00 PM
Thanks so much, David! Cheers ~ Kim
Date: 6/1/2021 12:07:00 PM
Hello Kim, I remember this tale as a child. Hugs Darlene.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 6/2/2021 10:32:00 AM
Hello Kim it is a good one. Hugs Darlene
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/1/2021 8:16:00 PM
It is a good one. Hugs ~ Kim
Date: 6/1/2021 10:11:00 AM
You managed to make the blue hole very interesting. Great imagination. Hugs.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/1/2021 11:20:00 AM
Thank you, Victor! Hugs ~ Kim
Date: 6/1/2021 9:16:00 AM
A very creative, scintillating pen on Alice's adventure. Nicely done. Best wishes in the contest, Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/1/2021 11:20:00 AM
Thank you, Milton! Have a great day!
Date: 6/1/2021 8:29:00 AM
The most imaginative representation of a Blue Hole ever, dearest Kim! Excellently written! Good luck! Hugs xxx
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/1/2021 9:01:00 AM
Thank you, my friend! :)

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