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My dad never noticed the pond. This poetess can't help but see...

Blue Angels

the ingenious geese, in the pond, fluttering wings - six fountains of grace they take off like jet fighters like blue angels all in synch
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Magdalinos Avatar
October 8, 2023 at 6:34 PM
Hello Kim,a wonderful Tanka, Blessings Kim!!
Rodrigues Avatar
October 8, 2023 at 6:58 PM
Thank you!
Rodrigues Avatar
October 8, 2023 at 6:57 PM
Thank you!
Brotherton Avatar
October 7, 2023 at 12:18 PM
A lovely Tanka Kim. Your lower phrase mingles nicely with the upper phrase. I love the way you've described modern technology as an extension of nature.
Rodrigues Avatar
October 8, 2023 at 10:18 AM
Thank you, Jerry!
Bowring Avatar
October 7, 2023 at 3:31 AM
Love this tanka dear Kim. A few lines that poetically describe so much to the reader that you can picture the pond and all its activity. Really clever wordplay. You can hear the ‘fluttering of wings’ as they take off! Great poetry. So enjoyed it. Thank you. Hugs and smiles to you for a great weekend. X :):)
Rodrigues Avatar
October 8, 2023 at 10:18 AM
Hope your weekend has been wonderful! Thank you!
Puddifoot Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 3:24 PM
excellent tanka - your imagery is always spot on.."six fountains of grace" i love that..thanks for commenting on my work :)
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 4:40 PM
Thank you too, Charlotte xx
Andresen Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 1:32 PM
- A beautiful sight, Kim - Lovely poem :) - hugs
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 2:49 PM
Thank you, sweet friend!
Hind Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 1:31 PM
Oh, what a different take on it. Very cool...
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 2:49 PM
Thank you, Paige!
Kendrick Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 12:15 PM
Those geese are so graceful aren't they. I am glad you shared this one with us. Very creative way you expressed the idea. Sara K
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 2:50 PM
A sighting I had! Hopefully did it justice! It was so cool. I believe I was the only human to witness this particular sighting.
One Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 11:04 AM
Wonderful descriptive Tanka.. nice one Kim.
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 12:00 PM
Thank you, dear friend!
Sharma  Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 9:10 AM
Like blue angels all in sync- wow, this is such a spellbinding and gorgeous write dear Kim! I absolutely love your word play here, so artistic "they take off like jet fighters" An amazing piece "six fountains of grace" That's really gorgeous!!
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 12:00 PM
Thank you so much, Hiya!
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