Blue

BLUE

Blue
Black and
Of course!    true
Jilted lady
Sky on a clear day
Subject in review is
When my girl left me I was
How I remember Crater Lake
Little girls wear pink but boys wear
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I was so fond of the various entries in the "Blue" contest, just had to write one

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Date: 2/13/2011 8:30:00 AM

Interesting perspective. Gives the reader something to think about. Best wishes in the contest. Karen

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/12/2011 10:56:00 PM

okay, NOW you gott'er!!

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/12/2011 10:00:00 AM

You have written a witty and wonderful nonet, Daver. Can relate to the "jilted lady," but also to Crater Lake. My father took us there when we traveled cross country. Quite a marvelous site to behold! Love, Carolyn

John Freeman

Date: 2/10/2011 9:22:00 AM

Quite a neat take on blue Daver. agape, Moses

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 2/10/2011 8:11:00 AM

It's so cool how you got inspired by the Blue contest, Dave :) Enjoyed reading this and how you ended your last line is also very interesting-- you sure got me curious about Crater Lake :) -- nikko :)

Audrey Haick

Date: 2/9/2011 9:16:00 PM

I love this Nonet with the "Blue" theme, Dave. Thanks for leaving kind comments on mine. Love, Annalise

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/9/2011 7:25:00 PM

Daver, how neat that the Blue contest inspired you. You should try it in that Tanka form! Hey, what happened with last line. I count only 7 syllables instead of 9. (if I am remembering nonet rules correctly). Just curious! Luv ya, Andrea

Constance La France

Date: 2/9/2011 6:09:00 PM

Very creative and fun, enjoyed very much~~

Carrie Richards

Date: 2/9/2011 4:36:00 PM

You have covered a lot of "blue territory" with this adorable poem!! Love each line.....and by the way...Crater Lake is just a few hours from us, and we love going there! Have been recently, in fact, no water could be bluer than that!! :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/9/2011 3:53:00 PM

Enjoyed this one, Daver..I am glad that you wrote one for us to enjoy...Sara

Christopher Marcum

Date: 2/9/2011 3:38:00 PM

smile -- i love this wonderfully painted canvas amid somewhat profound i would somehow say my dear friend and also, i love your magnificent verse in style; unique and absolutely splendid ~ it is Always such a joy to behold these combinations within the brilliance thus touching; a fave as is, "Your Gifted Self." ~ love, christopher ~