Blind Mice

The laggard oak leaves
skitter like brown field mice
their stem-tails and sharp edges
scratching across the road.
Grates and bushes trap them.
Layering they accumulate
awaiting the recomposition of life.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Shango Avatar
December 7, 2009 at 11:10 AM
Here is a powerful use of analogy, here is a metaphor that poets eternally shall like.
Guzzi Avatar
November 23, 2009 at 10:04 AM
How alive the leaves seem even in death..aye?
Cummings Avatar
November 23, 2009 at 8:38 AM
Like the visualization it evokes! So true. Thanks for your compliment on my poem. Mary
Sweetheart Avatar
November 18, 2009 at 9:01 AM
Like this one, Deb... got your comment.. am bagging Scale of Justice and writing a new "shape" for the contest .. check in with u when finished.... thankxxx for your help and patience and suggestions... u can come out from behind the desk now.. I've put the hammer down... hahahahahaha .. luv .. Linda-Marie, P.E.P.S. "Sweetheart", I think ...
Suzadail Jr. Avatar
November 17, 2009 at 6:26 PM
When I saw the title, I thought about Washington D.C., Congress in session. Still an exceptional write. Vince
Anish Avatar
November 13, 2009 at 9:13 PM
Nice fall scenario. The season is passing quickly. Peace and Blessings Matthew Anish
Freeman Avatar
November 13, 2009 at 7:07 PM
Haaaaaaa! What about that mushroom soup Deb? Okay, it's a personification, I see!Smile! Sincerely, Love, Moses
Curcio Avatar
November 13, 2009 at 2:11 PM
Ooooh - really fine poem Deb. Cerebral, philosophical and a painting of words!
Smith-Johnsen Avatar
November 13, 2009 at 12:35 PM
Hi Deb. Once again, you have stretched your skills and presented a pleasant read. Thank you for sharing. Lovingly, Dane
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November 13, 2009 at 10:37 AM
Nice personification of the oak leaves this Fall. I miss the radical change of trees during these seasons. Love, Iolanda
Haick Avatar
November 13, 2009 at 9:52 AM
Excellent Personification! Great imagery here! I love this, Deborah! Peace and love, Audrey
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