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Blind Mice

The laggard oak leaves skitter like brown field mice their stem-tails and sharp edges scratching across the road. Grates and bushes trap them. Layering they accumulate awaiting the recomposition of life.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 12/7/2009 11:10:00 AM
Here is a powerful use of analogy, here is a metaphor that poets eternally shall like.
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Date: 11/23/2009 10:04:00 AM
How alive the leaves seem even in death..aye?
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Date: 11/23/2009 8:38:00 AM
Like the visualization it evokes! So true. Thanks for your compliment on my poem. Mary
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Date: 11/18/2009 9:01:00 AM
Like this one, Deb... got your comment.. am bagging Scale of Justice and writing a new "shape" for the contest .. check in with u when finished.... thankxxx for your help and patience and suggestions... u can come out from behind the desk now.. I've put the hammer down... hahahahahaha .. luv .. Linda-Marie, P.E.P.S. "Sweetheart", I think ...
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Date: 11/17/2009 6:26:00 PM
When I saw the title, I thought about Washington D.C., Congress in session. Still an exceptional write. Vince
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Date: 11/13/2009 9:13:00 PM
Nice fall scenario. The season is passing quickly. Peace and Blessings Matthew Anish
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Date: 11/13/2009 7:07:00 PM
Haaaaaaa! What about that mushroom soup Deb? Okay, it's a personification, I see!Smile! Sincerely, Love, Moses
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Date: 11/13/2009 2:11:00 PM
Ooooh - really fine poem Deb. Cerebral, philosophical and a painting of words!
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Date: 11/13/2009 12:35:00 PM
Hi Deb. Once again, you have stretched your skills and presented a pleasant read. Thank you for sharing. Lovingly, Dane
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Date: 11/13/2009 10:37:00 AM
Nice personification of the oak leaves this Fall. I miss the radical change of trees during these seasons. Love, Iolanda
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Date: 11/13/2009 9:52:00 AM
Excellent Personification! Great imagery here! I love this, Deborah! Peace and love, Audrey
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