Banjo Casto Poet Verse

Bleeding Profile

Sunset dips from a bay’s view

Its pulp so tangerine clear--

Releasing a minty froth.

As her crown bleeds on water

I watch a hazy profile--

A faded memory now

Tearing my chilling nightfall.



Created by Banjo Casto  Nov 12 2014
Silhouette A Heptagonet
nette onclaud's Contest

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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders November 21, 2014 at 11:05 PM Incredible imagery weaved into your poignant write, Banjo! Congrats on your well deserved win!!

John Lawless November 16, 2014 at 4:40 PM Methinks I feel a metaphor. On one level this is the scene of a searing San Francisco sunset, on another the lamenting soul of a lost love. The use of the word "tearing" in the last line, with its multiple meanings...Beautifully written

Brenda Meier-Hans November 16, 2014 at 2:07 PM Congratulations on your winning poem Banjo

Sara Kendrick November 16, 2014 at 1:58 PM Congrats on your winning work..Way to go!!! Sara

Andrea Dietrich November 16, 2014 at 12:02 PM excellent writing. A very well deserved win. Congrats to you.

Nette Onclaud November 15, 2014 at 4:52 PM the nostalgic flow of your work drew me in, banjo...thank you for joining my contest and big congrats!.. hugggs

Jan Allison November 15, 2014 at 7:32 AM what beautiful imagery - many congrats on you win:-) Hugs jan xx