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alone wrapped up in deep melancholy I yearn for the dark shadows to dissolve… my doubts - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Cinquain Poetry Contest Hosted by William Kekaula Placed 1st © 4th February 2020

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Angela Crabtree

Date: 11/24/2020 10:34:00 AM

Very dark write, Paul. Sometimes I wish the same thing. Have a great day :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/25/2020 8:01:00 AM

Sometimes, depending on circumstances, we experience dark or sad emotions, Angela. Thank you for visiting. Regards // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 7/19/2020 10:11:00 AM

very deep write here indeed - so glad to see it was a winner in a contest

Paul Callus
Date: 7/19/2020 3:18:00 PM

Thank you, Jack. I find I'm more at ease when writing these short forms. Regards // paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/29/2020 7:18:00 PM

Finding comfort (even confidence) in the darkness is a peculiar state of mind ... but there is a certain attractive anonymity about it. PS: I know they are supposed to be tree, but in that image they look like weird eldritch creatures!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/27/2020 10:01:00 AM

Yes, very dark. Enjoyed reading your creative work. Congrats. Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 2/28/2020 4:33:00 PM

Thank you, Sara; so pleased you enjoyed. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Jenish Somadas

Date: 2/23/2020 10:59:00 PM

Doubts in a lonely mind.. Emotions overflowing.. Great win Paul..

Paul Callus
Date: 2/25/2020 9:37:00 AM

I'm pleased by your lovely comments, Jenish...thank you! Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 2/23/2020 9:03:00 PM

My dear Paul, your short poem is so emotionally packed, even when dark, your adept artistry shines. It can be challenging to move beyond the shadow of one's doubt, and within that shadow is a dreadful place to be. It's so wonderful to read your gripping poetry, my friend. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 2/28/2020 4:50:00 PM

I am sure I replied a few days ago to your most lovely complimentary comments, Susan...and I still believe they are:) Thank you, my friend. ~ Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 2/23/2020 3:47:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Paul, perfect poem with fantastic flow. Hugs Eve

Paul Callus
Date: 2/25/2020 9:36:00 AM

Thank you,Eve. I enjoyed your winning entry, too! Hugs // paul

Panagiota Romios

Date: 2/11/2020 10:59:00 AM

The Cinquain is an unusual form. Good luck, Paul Panagiota xx

Paul Callus
Date: 2/11/2020 1:23:00 PM

I am sure you will tackle this form successfully, same as you did with the Clerihew :) Thank you for stopping by. Regards & Blessings // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 2/11/2020 12:06:00 AM

Enough of Winter, enough of dark shadows - they bring a melancholy upon us which rests heavy on our shoulders - we yearn to see the sunshine through the trees, and dissolve our doubts. Awesome write Paul, you always say so much in your few words, a true master of poetry with your ink and quill. Warm regards, and hugs, Jennifer.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/11/2020 3:26:00 AM

:) Thank you, Jenny. As usual you visit with lovely and meaningful comments. Winter will soon be over, and this bleak landscape will turn to lush green! ~ Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Brenda Chiri

Date: 2/9/2020 4:28:00 AM

Oh Paul I have missed reading you my friend! Loved this short sweet and lovely! ;)

Paul Callus
Date: 2/9/2020 1:08:00 PM

Thank you, Brenda. A pleasure to have you stopping by....you've been missed. Warm regards // paul

Anil Deo

Date: 2/6/2020 2:05:00 AM

wow, if deep shadows would do that, the GREEK Melancholy would be a healing humor indeed. Kudos for originality. shalom, shalom Friend

Paul Callus
Date: 2/6/2020 1:31:00 PM

Thank you and kudos for your feedback, Anil :) Peace // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 2/5/2020 2:16:00 PM

oh, such a dark one here but i love it

Paul Callus
Date: 2/6/2020 1:30:00 PM

Thank you, Jack. Hope you're keeping well, my friend. Regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/5/2020 1:50:00 PM

I've never tried this form, but you did wonders with it, Paul! Just 22 syllables and the emotions pour forth. Excellent writing, my friend. Best wishes in the contest. Hugs, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 2/6/2020 1:29:00 PM

Thank you, Carolyn. Unfortunately at present my writing time is limited, so I try to make do with short poetry forms! Hugs // paul

Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 2/5/2020 7:17:00 AM

I must say it is a Gem dear friend Paul. You have created a beauty with some dark shadows, which normally surrounds our mind and heart and some rays of hopes too, which shows the changing mood of human nature. Great lines...it goes as my favourite too....With best wishes always.....Ravindra

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2020 11:46:00 AM

Thank you for the overall generous feedback, my friend...and that includes the fav, too. Best regards to you // paul

Sandra Adams

Date: 2/4/2020 8:55:00 PM

Powerful and deep this one is... Wonderfully crafted Paul :) hugs

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2020 11:44:00 AM

Thank you for your kind comments, Sandra. Enjoy the rest of the day:) Hugs // paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 2/4/2020 4:30:00 PM

ooh - i did not expect that last line, paul! nicely crafted...

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2020 11:43:00 AM

I love your reaction,Ilene...thank you! Regards // paul

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 2/4/2020 2:46:00 PM

sometimes the dark shadows seem to match our moods, well expressed dear Paul, winning wishes xo

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2020 11:42:00 AM

Thank you, Vienna. Perhaps in such moments it would be a good idea to have a nightingale keep us company! Regards /x/ paul

Vijay Pandit

Date: 2/4/2020 11:19:00 AM

Emotions come alive in your succinct write, Paul. All the best.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2020 11:39:00 AM

Many thanks, my friend. Have a nice and productive day! Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/4/2020 9:43:00 AM

- This was so sad and dark, Paul ... but, excellent written - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2020 11:34:00 AM

Thank you with regards to all your comments, Anne-Lise:) Hugs // paul

Tom Cunningham

Date: 2/4/2020 9:41:00 AM

Your dark words alone would have given the reader that image that accompanies your verse. Well written Paul. Good luck. Tom

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2020 11:32:00 AM

Thank you, Tom. I was lucky to find a really good matching picture! Regards // paul