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Bleak Landscape

alone
wrapped up in deep 
melancholy I yearn
for the dark shadows to dissolve…
my doubts


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Cinquain Poetry Contest
Hosted by William Kekaula
Placed 1st
© 4th February 2020

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Angela Crabtree

November 24, 2020 at 10:34 AM

Very dark write, Paul. Sometimes I wish the same thing. Have a great day :)

Paul Callus

November 25, 2020 at 8:01 AM

Sometimes, depending on circumstances, we experience dark or sad emotions, Angela. Thank you for visiting. Regards // paul

Jack Horne

July 19, 2020 at 10:11 AM

very deep write here indeed - so glad to see it was a winner in a contest

Paul Callus

July 19, 2020 at 3:18 PM

Thank you, Jack. I find I'm more at ease when writing these short forms. Regards // paul

Timothy Hicks

April 29, 2020 at 7:18 PM

Finding comfort (even confidence) in the darkness is a peculiar state of mind ... but there is a certain attractive anonymity about it. PS: I know they are supposed to be tree, but in that image they look like weird eldritch creatures!

Sara Kendrick

February 27, 2020 at 10:01 AM

Yes, very dark. Enjoyed reading your creative work. Congrats. Sara

Paul Callus

February 28, 2020 at 4:33 PM

Thank you, Sara; so pleased you enjoyed. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Jenish Somadas

February 23, 2020 at 10:59 PM

Doubts in a lonely mind.. Emotions overflowing.. Great win Paul..

Paul Callus

February 25, 2020 at 9:37 AM

I'm pleased by your lovely comments, Jenish...thank you! Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

February 23, 2020 at 9:03 PM

My dear Paul, your short poem is so emotionally packed, even when dark, your adept artistry shines. It can be challenging to move beyond the shadow of one's doubt, and within that shadow is a dreadful place to be. It's so wonderful to read your gripping poetry, my friend. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

February 28, 2020 at 4:50 PM

I am sure I replied a few days ago to your most lovely complimentary comments, Susan...and I still believe they are:) Thank you, my friend. ~ Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Eve Roper

February 23, 2020 at 3:47 PM

Congratulations on your win, Paul, perfect poem with fantastic flow. Hugs Eve

Paul Callus

February 25, 2020 at 9:36 AM

Thank you,Eve. I enjoyed your winning entry, too! Hugs // paul

Panagiota Romios

February 11, 2020 at 10:59 AM

The Cinquain is an unusual form. Good luck, Paul Panagiota xx

Paul Callus

February 11, 2020 at 1:23 PM

I am sure you will tackle this form successfully, same as you did with the Clerihew :) Thank you for stopping by. Regards & Blessings // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

February 11, 2020 at 12:06 AM

Enough of Winter, enough of dark shadows - they bring a melancholy upon us which rests heavy on our shoulders - we yearn to see the sunshine through the trees, and dissolve our doubts. Awesome write Paul, you always say so much in your few words, a true master of poetry with your ink and quill. Warm regards, and hugs, Jennifer.

Paul Callus

February 11, 2020 at 3:26 AM

:) Thank you, Jenny. As usual you visit with lovely and meaningful comments. Winter will soon be over, and this bleak landscape will turn to lush green! ~ Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Brenda Chiri

February 9, 2020 at 4:28 AM

Oh Paul I have missed reading you my friend! Loved this short sweet and lovely! ;)

Paul Callus

February 9, 2020 at 1:08 PM

Thank you, Brenda. A pleasure to have you stopping by....you've been missed. Warm regards // paul

Anil Deo

February 6, 2020 at 2:05 AM

wow, if deep shadows would do that, the GREEK Melancholy would be a healing humor indeed. Kudos for originality. shalom, shalom Friend

Paul Callus

February 6, 2020 at 1:31 PM

Thank you and kudos for your feedback, Anil :) Peace // paul

Jack Horne

February 5, 2020 at 2:16 PM

oh, such a dark one here but i love it

Paul Callus

February 6, 2020 at 1:30 PM

Thank you, Jack. Hope you're keeping well, my friend. Regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

February 5, 2020 at 1:50 PM

I've never tried this form, but you did wonders with it, Paul! Just 22 syllables and the emotions pour forth. Excellent writing, my friend. Best wishes in the contest. Hugs, Carolyn

Paul Callus

February 6, 2020 at 1:29 PM

Thank you, Carolyn. Unfortunately at present my writing time is limited, so I try to make do with short poetry forms! Hugs // paul

Ravindra K Kapoor

February 5, 2020 at 7:17 AM

I must say it is a Gem dear friend Paul. You have created a beauty with some dark shadows, which normally surrounds our mind and heart and some rays of hopes too, which shows the changing mood of human nature. Great lines...it goes as my favourite too....With best wishes always.....Ravindra

Paul Callus

February 5, 2020 at 11:46 AM

Thank you for the overall generous feedback, my friend...and that includes the fav, too. Best regards to you // paul