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Blazing Heat

The blazing sun
     scorches lonely daydreams—
He saunters like a penguin
    lemonades in hand. 
We two laughed until moonlight.

Copyright March 18, 2015

Written for Poetry Soup Member Contest:  TANKA 2 – 
Sponsor Andrea Dietrich

Read more at: http://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry_contests/member_contest_details.aspx?ContestID=6218

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Aarushi Pandey

January 13, 2017 at 10:01 AM

This is very beautiful.

Poet Destroyer A

March 22, 2015 at 1:58 PM

DANE, Congratulations on your awesome TANKA 2 win Always & Forever <3 Luv ~LINDA~

Andrea Dietrich

March 21, 2015 at 9:44 PM

Dane Ann, it's always a treat to see you have entered one of my contests. Long time no see! i really loved the image of a guy like a penguin sauntering with lemonade. I just did not get the connection with lonely daydreams and I wanted you to keep it in present tense instead of switching to the past tense with laughed. Thanks for entering with this poem and congrats in my contest.

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

March 22, 2015 at 2:56 AM

Thanks for your critique and for placing me in the winner's circle.

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