Blazing Heat

The blazing sun scorches lonely daydreams— He saunters like a penguin lemonades in hand. We two laughed until moonlight. Copyright March 18, 2015 Written for Poetry Soup Member Contest: TANKA 2 – Sponsor Andrea Dietrich Read more at: http://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry_contests/member_contest_details.aspx?ContestID=6218

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Aarushi Pandey

Date: 1/13/2017 10:01:00 AM

This is very beautiful.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/22/2015 1:58:00 PM

DANE, Congratulations on your awesome TANKA 2 win Always & Forever <3 Luv ~LINDA~

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/21/2015 9:44:00 PM

Dane Ann, it's always a treat to see you have entered one of my contests. Long time no see! i really loved the image of a guy like a penguin sauntering with lemonade. I just did not get the connection with lonely daydreams and I wanted you to keep it in present tense instead of switching to the past tense with laughed. Thanks for entering with this poem and congrats in my contest.

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Date: 3/22/2015 2:56:00 AM

Thanks for your critique and for placing me in the winner's circle.