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Charles Messina's The Beatles--Lay It To Me Contest...24 Jun 25...

Inspiration from the Beatles' song 'Blackbird'

 

Blackbird -- slight typo corrected


What is that, 'midst gray silhouette
A night-winged creature slips, beset?
Fluttering through pampas and ground
Mellow the dulcet trails of sound

O blackbird, my breaths awaken
By soft chimes...this angst forsaken
Glimmering 'neath still of moonlight ,
I find peace in warlber's hymned flight !
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Gasun Avatar
June 28, 2025 at 3:20 AM
I love this so much especially the smooth flow of perfect rhymes. A stellar lay inspired by this unfamiliar song to me. Thanks for sharing my dearest friend/sis. More power and blessings! Have a fantastic weekend! Hugs
Dietrich Avatar
June 26, 2025 at 9:23 PM
Very nicely done. Not sure that I recall this song of theirs.
Wolf Avatar
June 25, 2025 at 8:28 PM
As sweet as the song and the flight of the species described!... Soup mail, please. Thanks, gw
Sharma  Avatar
June 24, 2025 at 9:58 PM
Oh my, this is so evocative and profound, dear Nette. Your storytelling skills and the way you've painted a deeply captivating imagery with the wizardry of words here, ah, impeccable. I especially love that second stanza... "O blackbird, my breaths awaken By soft chimes...this angst forsaken" That part conveys so many sombre sentiments, touching one's soul in myriad ways. Beautifully written as always, pleasure reading your work, sweet friend!
Hind Avatar
June 24, 2025 at 6:35 PM
This is breathtaking. Really love it. Your first line is a bit off center, just telling you. Otherwise, perrrfect!!!
Goldsmith Avatar
June 24, 2025 at 1:11 PM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Blackbird" write. "Good Luck" Have a wonderful/blessed day writing away............
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