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Little bits and pieces of what was once complete and whole
Broken shards of a crystal vase, each one sliced into my soul

A single red rose he offered, to ease my sorrow and my fears
petals withered and fell,  along with my woeful desolate tears

Broken vase, wounded soul, withered rose;  love took its toll


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{February 23, 2016 ~ Fragments Contest by Broken Wings}

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Charlie Smith

Date: 3/9/2016 8:40:00 AM

Beautifully done, congratulations

Lin Lane
Date: 3/9/2016 9:01:00 AM

Thanks very much, Charlie.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 3/8/2016 10:20:00 PM

Oh Lin how lovely.. wonderful expression.. congrats on big win..

Lin Lane
Date: 3/9/2016 1:34:00 AM

Hiya, Upma. Thank you so much.

Probir Gupta

Date: 3/8/2016 8:27:00 AM

Profound moments in five lines. Congrats....

Lin Lane
Date: 3/8/2016 8:28:00 AM

Thank you very much, Probir.

Susan Gentry

Date: 3/8/2016 6:22:00 AM

Congratulations on your awesome take on this theme! Very well done.

Lin Lane
Date: 3/8/2016 8:28:00 AM

Thank you, Susan. I appreciate your comments.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/7/2016 3:33:00 PM

Great how you went from the vase to the rose and then to the soul. Great rhyme with love's Toll. Congrats on the win.

Lin Lane
Date: 3/7/2016 4:20:00 PM

Thanks, Andrea.

Beautiful Scars

Date: 3/7/2016 8:25:00 AM

First of all, I love the picture that you posted with this poem, and secondly, "petals withered and fell", so descriptively accurate and moving. congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo

Lin Lane
Date: 3/7/2016 4:20:00 PM

Thanks, Laura.