Lin Lane Poet Rhyme

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Bits and Pieces

Little bits and pieces of what was once complete and whole
Broken shards of a crystal vase, each one sliced into my soul

A single red rose he offered, to ease my sorrow and my fears
petals withered and fell,  along with my woeful desolate tears

Broken vase, wounded soul, withered rose;  love took its toll


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{February 23, 2016 ~ Fragments Contest by Broken Wings}

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Charlie Smith March 9, 2016 at 8:40 AM Beautifully done, congratulations Lin Lane March 9, 2016 at 9:01 AM Thanks very much, Charlie.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma March 8, 2016 at 10:20 PM Oh Lin how lovely.. wonderful expression.. congrats on big win.. Lin Lane March 9, 2016 at 1:34 AM Hiya, Upma. Thank you so much.

Probir Gupta March 8, 2016 at 8:27 AM Profound moments in five lines. Congrats.... Lin Lane March 8, 2016 at 8:28 AM Thank you very much, Probir.

Susan Gentry March 8, 2016 at 6:22 AM Congratulations on your awesome take on this theme! Very well done. Lin Lane March 8, 2016 at 8:28 AM Thank you, Susan. I appreciate your comments.

Andrea Dietrich March 7, 2016 at 3:33 PM Great how you went from the vase to the rose and then to the soul. Great rhyme with love's Toll. Congrats on the win. Lin Lane March 7, 2016 at 4:20 PM Thanks, Andrea.

Beautiful Scars March 7, 2016 at 8:25 AM First of all, I love the picture that you posted with this poem, and secondly, "petals withered and fell", so descriptively accurate and moving. congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo Lin Lane March 7, 2016 at 4:20 PM Thanks, Laura.

Keith Bickerstaffe February 23, 2016 at 7:06 PM What a sorrowful piece Lin... your final line sums up your sadness. I trust you will soon be happy again. God Bless, Keith Lin Lane February 23, 2016 at 9:42 PM Thank you, Keith. I'm happy. I have a new vase, a healed soul, and roses are no longer my favorite flower.

Tim Smith February 23, 2016 at 4:56 PM I really like this Lin...definite winner Lin Lane February 23, 2016 at 5:02 PM Thank you very much, Tim. Here's a wink and a smile for you ;)