L'Nass Shango Poet Verse

Birthday

Yesterday repeat again the time when I was born
And I before the mirror came and stood
And saw nothing to make the young heart forlorn
Just another day, another year gone for good
But the sky is blue the same
And the jasmine still brings memories
And the poincianna still aflame
Tell of deep, deep, unknown histories
That I am here and she is there
And the sun is strewn carelessly everywhere

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Caroline Cécile Delacroix April 2, 2010 at 7:56 PM Interesting birthday poem giving me a feeling of things not changing, being the same each year. The sky is blue, but the sun is strewn carelessly everywhere. Although well written, there is a sad undertone to your poem. It is difficult indeed when the one you love lives far away. I hope someday you can find the way to be closer. Thanks for sharing and thank you for your comments on mine. Caroline.

Simone Segal March 30, 2010 at 9:01 AM Love your poetry, we have all missed you, a novel! i would love to know more, love Simone

Barbara Gorelick March 30, 2010 at 7:04 AM The whole poem is lovely..but the last line is something that will stick with me..I will repeat it and give you credit my dear. BG

Andrea Dietrich March 30, 2010 at 12:22 AM You know, sometimes birthdays just are not fun and all you can do is think, what an ordinary day, when you are feeling forlorn, of course. I love how you used the images of jasmine and the sun strewn carelessly everywhere (what a great line!) LUv, andrea

Audrey Haick March 29, 2010 at 6:39 PM Where have you been my Jamaican Brother?? Your last poem was posted in early March...Hope you've been well...my SM doesn't work-still LOL. Happy belated B'day.. I'm sure that you're grateful..just the usual sadness that comes around sometimes on B'days...but gratefully, it passes..nevertheless, another excellent poem, L'nass...good to have you back! Peace, love, your sister, Audrey

Carrie Richards March 29, 2010 at 6:21 PM Yes....those thoughts that arrive upon the day of another year's passing...such melancholy words, my friend....I have often felt the same...in one way or another, birthdays can be rather difficult days to face oneself. Your last line just elegantly carries me away "the sun that is strewn carelessly" wow!........leaving me with such intense feelings! You are a poet whose work I so admire. (sincerely). Love, Carrie

Debbie Guzzi March 29, 2010 at 4:35 PM ah the careless and carefull and precious sun may it always shine gently on you. Happy Birthday wise one! Light & Love

Sara Kendrick March 29, 2010 at 3:51 PM Very expressive and descriptive write..Enjoyed reading.. Thanks for stopping by and reading and commenting on my work..Yes, I am having pain which the severity of it comes and goes...Going to the doctor tomorrow for some relief...I think that I did something to a disc in my neck and it is pressing on the median nerve...Sara

Doris Culverhouse March 29, 2010 at 3:19 PM Happy!! Happy Birthday!! happy times for you always!!