Birds In Flight Edited

As black as my birdlover poet's 
pen ink hue in hue
A rook and a raven flew flew 
flew
when the wind it breezily blew 
blew blew
and blustery became the view 
view view

An albatross then gracefully 
took to the air
and for hours it seemed to 
linger there
O' birds of flight your secrets 
tell
and if you know which of us
had end up in heaven or hell?
For isn't all is well that ends 
well?
Lets pray there ain't hell's murk 
but Eden's light 
at the end of the tunnel!
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Thirtyseven Avatar
May 11, 2014 at 8:08 AM
I whole heartedly agree with, may it all end in light. Well said, and a winner too I take it. Congrats.
Ali Avatar
January 31, 2014 at 1:23 AM
Heaven is where I want to go too, I'll probably be looking out to birds now for a signal :) Nice write!!!
Lamoureux Avatar
January 29, 2014 at 9:31 AM
Well expressed, congrats.
Mehta Avatar
January 29, 2014 at 6:44 AM
Wonderful poem and congrats on the fine win, Zaynub
Tsiluma Avatar
January 29, 2014 at 12:26 AM
Lovely poem S.zaynub! I love the imagery of the birds and how you've related it to poetry. It's easy to take flight but what awaits us at the end of the tunnel is what may determine our destination in life. Well written poem.
Kithinji Avatar
August 24, 2013 at 4:34 PM
An albatross... seemed to linger there!
Newman Avatar
August 6, 2013 at 6:44 AM
Another great read, the imagery of the birds is great, I pray heaven is where I am bound, enjoyed this poem, blessings sueellen
Rutherford Avatar
July 31, 2013 at 5:01 PM
Beautiful poem S. !!! Different form for me ,but I like this very much. Music in poetry. Anne
Onclaud Avatar
July 30, 2013 at 11:33 AM
you feel my heart with hope, S...you collect words and mold them into a beautiful piece of art..:) huggs
Onclaud Avatar
August 6, 2013 at 4:47 AM
did we use the correct form of nazam?..
Rabi Avatar
July 30, 2013 at 9:54 AM
NICE POETRY
Anglesey Avatar
July 30, 2013 at 6:42 AM
I like the poetry form and the rhyme scheme. Very different and refreshing. :)
Abdul  Avatar
July 30, 2013 at 1:17 AM
hew / flew / blew ....according to me is not a tight texture for the poem , do not mind , i tell the truth what i thik about the poem .. rest is marvellous ! keep writing .
Barq Avatar
July 29, 2013 at 6:36 AM
The above Nazam depicts a realistic approach of a man who loves to know all secret of vital energy necessary for destination other than what a common man wishes to... The verses are powerful and majestically woven...
Bateson Avatar
July 29, 2013 at 5:39 AM
Indeed, let's pray for Eden. Lovely..Betty
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