John Lawless Poet Free verse

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OK, I deviated a bit from the contest rules in the wording of the first line.  My technique for addressing the contest themes is to close my eyes and let the muse decide where she would like to go with the theme.  She leads me to write many poems that do not exactly fit into the contest rules while addressing the contest them.  Like the nice GPS lady I have learned to follow her direction.

Big Storm A'Comin'

Big Storm A’Comin’


“Big storm a’comin’”
that’s what the old man said.

A heavy quiet crept over the valley
as if embracing a frightened child.

No lullabies riffled through the muffled trees
no rocking motion to engender sleepiness.

Concern rose as heatedly as the sun
shutters nailed shut in defiance of its light

children running aimlessly
mimicking their parents

scurrying about chasing away
the memory of the last time

the old man said:
“Big storm a’comin’”.


4/16/2016

submitted to – A Storm Is Brewing – Poetry Contest
sponsor – Kelly Deschler

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Charlie Smith April 16, 2016 at 9:19 AM Good entry John, good luck. Why is it always the old man that knows about bad weather? I'm old and I don't know when to come in out of a hail storm...

Jan Allison April 16, 2016 at 7:08 AM LOVE your take on the theme John - yes I have to follow my muse too but I have learned to turn the GPS off - can't stand being lead up dark allies lol:-) hugs Jan xx John Lawless April 16, 2016 at 7:15 AM YEAH, and I know there's a change in her voice when she says "RECALCULATING!!' for the third time.....