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Big City Snake

self imposed prison captivates a song bird stumbling over insecure formation of the wrong word stabalizing foundation atop false ground deception dressed to impress in a tall gown quietly with humming embedding a soft sound fooling with the friendly touch of a small town is the big city snake born and bred in the pits released from it's cage around seven or six

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 3/23/2013 6:08:00 PM
Alex, Congratulations with your Featured Poem of the week. Wishing you the best this new coming week. Take care :-) Linda
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Alex Roelfson
Date: 3/25/2013 10:34:00 AM
Thanks Linda I have a feeling I'm going to need it haha
Date: 3/22/2013 9:59:00 PM
Great flow and i thought the imagery was perfect forthe length. I thought it was perfect.
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Alex Roelfson
Date: 3/23/2013 9:51:00 AM
Wow thank you so much Joanna!
Date: 3/20/2013 6:51:00 AM
if it wasn't written by you i would've written it. great job. strong tone.
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Alex Roelfson
Date: 3/20/2013 10:30:00 AM
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.
Date: 3/19/2013 2:44:00 PM
It could definitely have more detail, but yet it's still a very nice write!!!!
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Alex Roelfson
Date: 3/20/2013 10:30:00 AM
Thanks for the critique Nate, I always try to get better!
Date: 3/13/2013 5:55:00 AM
WOW..I Love thr rhym in it and that sofistical sound....welldone great poem:
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Alex Roelfson
Date: 3/13/2013 9:17:00 AM
Thank you for reading, and I appreciate the compliment!

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