Jenna Logan Poet Sonnet

Beyond the Sun's Dominion

In fretful sleep I weightlessly drifted   
hours beyond the sun's cosmic dominion
where I perceived the entire world shifted
ten degrees off course, in my opinion

I glimpsed violet glimmers of twilight
while I seemed to be suspended in time
Clocks ticked in synchrony during the night
Whispered words were uttered in perfect rhyme

High flowed the tide of moonlight's procuring
as I wrestled the sheets for serenity of sleep
I tossed and turned, while tiresomely enduring
the unyielding baas and mehs of leaping sheep

I surrendered, then tumbled from my bed
with listless body. My eyes, bloodshot red



September 12, 2020
A Lipogram Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Emile Pinet

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Jan Allison September 15, 2020 at 8:02 AM Oh Jenna i can relate to the issue as I've had sleep issues since my hubby had his cancer surgery in 2013,you have portrayed insomnia so poetically, many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx Jenna Logan September 15, 2020 at 11:18 AM Thank you very much, Jan. I hope all is well now.

Sam Kauffman September 14, 2020 at 2:52 PM You drew a picture of the experience of numerous people robbed of sleep my friend! Pictures in unique, vivid focus. High fives and kudos on your podium win! Jenna Logan September 14, 2020 at 6:02 PM Thank you so very much, Sam. I appreciate your kindness.

Mark Koplin September 14, 2020 at 12:38 PM Top notch dear Jenna! Congratulations on your excellent win my friend! Awesome work and a great poem! Jenna Logan September 14, 2020 at 6:01 PM Thanks so very much for your kudos, Mark.

Emile Pinet September 14, 2020 at 9:39 AM Congratulations Jenna, your poem earned a distinguished place in my contest. This was one of the hardest contest I’ve ever had to judge, the quality of the poems entered were outstanding and yours was one of them my friend, Emile. Jenna Logan September 14, 2020 at 6:01 PM Emile, Thank you for considering my poem in your contest. I appreciate its placement.

John Watt September 14, 2020 at 9:22 AM Wishing you well-deserved congratulations for your win in the Lipogram contest, Jenna. A wonderful write. Enjoy your week, my friend ~ John

John Watt September 12, 2020 at 5:33 PM Excellent sonnet Jenna, with the additional challenge met of lipogram constraints. You've hit upon a universal malady of a sleepless night we can all relate to. Best wishes in Emile's contest ~ John Jenna Logan September 14, 2020 at 6:00 PM Thank you very much for your insight, John. It placed in the contest...9th, I think.

Tom Cunningham September 12, 2020 at 6:48 AM Youve m*de this look so e*sy Jenn* not *n e*sy one to compose. Nothing worse th*n * troubled nights sleep Good luck. Turkey Tom. Jenna Logan September 12, 2020 at 7:45 AM Hi Tom, and thank you very much for taking time from your holiday to leave me a comment. Hugs. haha at Turkey Tom. C*reful...Th*nksgiving is f*st *ppro*ching.

John Lawless September 12, 2020 at 5:54 AM I give this an A followed by some hhhhh's Great job Jenna. the line "the unyielding voices of countless sheep" holds a hint of political comment and an idea that would cause anyone to toss and turn. Jenna Logan September 12, 2020 at 6:04 AM lol John. I sincerely hope it's the only A to be found. I'm delighted that you found a hint of what you read into my lines. It's my hope that everyone who reads it will see something that they decipher in kind. Thanks so much for reading and leaving your thoughts.

John Gondolf September 12, 2020 at 5:48 AM This is a wonderfully written sonnet, Jenna, and written with no A's to boot. Nicely done. I have been struggling with sleep issues lately, too much stress at work. Have a great weekend. Hugs, John Jenna Logan September 12, 2020 at 6:02 AM Thanks for always being so encouraging, John. Lipograms are tricky, and when a change is made, it's so often inevitable that the new words(s) will contain an 'a.' So it was with these lines, and now I hope it's an "A" free Sonnet. Hugs.

Sigrid Ermine September 12, 2020 at 4:59 AM Woah, stop the clocks! Sonnet is truly splendid, Jenna. The vibrancy of your night depicted is impactful. The No. One Winner.! Definitely wouldn't know it's a lipogram. Excellent stuff! Jenna Logan September 12, 2020 at 6:00 AM Your comments are always such fun to read, Sigrid. Thanks so much for your support and awesome review.