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Beyond the Sun's Dominion

In fretful sleep I weightlessly drifted hours beyond the sun's cosmic dominion where I perceived the entire world shifted ten degrees off course, in my opinion I glimpsed violet glimmers of twilight while I seemed to be suspended in time Clocks ticked in synchrony during the night Whispered words were uttered in perfect rhyme High flowed the tide of moonlight's procuring as I wrestled the sheets for serenity of sleep I tossed and turned, while tiresomely enduring the unyielding baas and mehs of leaping sheep I surrendered, then tumbled from my bed with listless body. My eyes, bloodshot red September 12, 2020 A Lipogram Poetry Contest Sponsor: Emile Pinet

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Jan Allison

Date: 9/15/2020 8:02:00 AM

Oh Jenna i can relate to the issue as I've had sleep issues since my hubby had his cancer surgery in 2013,you have portrayed insomnia so poetically, many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/15/2020 11:18:00 AM

Thank you very much, Jan. I hope all is well now.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 9/14/2020 2:52:00 PM

You drew a picture of the experience of numerous people robbed of sleep my friend! Pictures in unique, vivid focus. High fives and kudos on your podium win!

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/14/2020 6:02:00 PM

Thank you so very much, Sam. I appreciate your kindness.

Mark Koplin

Date: 9/14/2020 12:38:00 PM

Top notch dear Jenna! Congratulations on your excellent win my friend! Awesome work and a great poem!

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/14/2020 6:01:00 PM

Thanks so very much for your kudos, Mark.

Emile Pinet

Date: 9/14/2020 9:39:00 AM

Congratulations Jenna, your poem earned a distinguished place in my contest. This was one of the hardest contest I’ve ever had to judge, the quality of the poems entered were outstanding and yours was one of them my friend, Emile.

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/14/2020 6:01:00 PM

Emile, Thank you for considering my poem in your contest. I appreciate its placement.

John Watt

Date: 9/14/2020 9:22:00 AM

Wishing you well-deserved congratulations for your win in the Lipogram contest, Jenna. A wonderful write. Enjoy your week, my friend ~ John

John Watt

Date: 9/12/2020 5:33:00 PM

Excellent sonnet Jenna, with the additional challenge met of lipogram constraints. You've hit upon a universal malady of a sleepless night we can all relate to. Best wishes in Emile's contest ~ John

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/14/2020 6:00:00 PM

Thank you very much for your insight, John. It placed in the contest...9th, I think.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 9/12/2020 6:48:00 AM

Youve m*de this look so e*sy Jenn* not *n e*sy one to compose. Nothing worse th*n * troubled nights sleep Good luck. Turkey Tom.

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/12/2020 7:45:00 AM

Hi Tom, and thank you very much for taking time from your holiday to leave me a comment. Hugs. haha at Turkey Tom. C*reful...Th*nksgiving is f*st *ppro*ching.

John Lawless

Date: 9/12/2020 5:54:00 AM

I give this an A followed by some hhhhh's Great job Jenna. the line "the unyielding voices of countless sheep" holds a hint of political comment and an idea that would cause anyone to toss and turn.

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/12/2020 6:04:00 AM

lol John. I sincerely hope it's the only A to be found. I'm delighted that you found a hint of what you read into my lines. It's my hope that everyone who reads it will see something that they decipher in kind. Thanks so much for reading and leaving your thoughts.

John Gondolf

Date: 9/12/2020 5:48:00 AM

This is a wonderfully written sonnet, Jenna, and written with no A's to boot. Nicely done. I have been struggling with sleep issues lately, too much stress at work. Have a great weekend. Hugs, John

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/12/2020 6:02:00 AM

Thanks for always being so encouraging, John. Lipograms are tricky, and when a change is made, it's so often inevitable that the new words(s) will contain an 'a.' So it was with these lines, and now I hope it's an "A" free Sonnet. Hugs.

Sigrid Ermine

Date: 9/12/2020 4:59:00 AM

Woah, stop the clocks! Sonnet is truly splendid, Jenna. The vibrancy of your night depicted is impactful. The No. One Winner.! Definitely wouldn't know it's a lipogram. Excellent stuff!

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/12/2020 6:00:00 AM

Your comments are always such fun to read, Sigrid. Thanks so much for your support and awesome review.