Beyond the Shine

Men lined up to fall down these stairs
willingly,  falling over each other to fall first
and laugh last as each victim learns from burns
  burning incessantly, unforgiving and fragile
I toed this line and peered the edge
this fools ledge draws crowds like 
   glitzty carnival amusements
     
Her cotton candy lips and 
roller coaster curves disturb my calm
and reason, leaving every rational action
a far off place I forget exists 
Curls sway tracing her face lively 
she brushes them aside gracefully
always smiling when she speaks

Apprehensive, stepping past 
piles of slain suitors and pretenders
carrying my worth without pretense and braggadocio
I'll seek this grail and sense this sweet
   ambrosia
Spying her demise from the inside
attacking the fortification with intellect
bypassing the fornication until our threads are woven
like skilled artisans tapestries
tap into me...fill and drink
listen and think...talk and flow back naturally
capture me with the allures unseen
to the corpses I stepped past to find you

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 5/12/2009 5:06:00 AM
Whoa Steve! I must agree with all commenters here. Simply brilliant. And may I say, hope your capture of her is as enchanting (although she could never write it so). Love is a beautiful thing. Hope it works out. Love, Shar
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Date: 5/11/2009 9:42:00 PM
What talent you have for bringing us to special places in very intelligent verse. The reader gets a real sense of the alluring women who left "piles of slain suitors and pretenders" in her wake. Awesome writing! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/11/2009 9:09:00 PM
Steve, this is just wonderful starting with the title! Love the second paragraph of verses very creative, this poem is a piece that shines beyond! Thank you for warm and kind comments always appreciated.
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