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Beyond Love's Limit

How quickly I got drunk on him
He was the salt I licked off the rim 
    of glass after unsatiable glass
Intoxicated on love, over the brim
I drank beyond limit, beyond control
    until inebriation took an ugly toll


Then the drinks became too bitter
    like sparkling champagne loses its glitter
In sober state I admitted my mistake -
    drunkenness is a hard hitter
I taste salt from tears upon my tongue
    because of a song I should've left unsung

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Ovidiu Bocsa September 5, 2017 at 12:24 PM Limits are signs of our morality. Why Augustine said”Love me and do what you want”. I suppose: because Love means responsibility, but a subtle observer like Shakespeare thinks:” too child is love to ask it mind.” Nevertheless the inner song deserves be sung and shared: in happy cases.

Old Man Emu September 4, 2017 at 4:51 AM Wow Lin, what a fantastic poem. A real hard hitter! Glad I stopped by to view your talent. Regards, Craig

Frederic Parker September 3, 2017 at 4:22 PM explosive opening couple of lines, with a very strong ending...I really like this one Lin Lane September 3, 2017 at 7:01 PM Thanks, Frederic. Your visits and comments are always encouraging.

Ilene Bauer September 3, 2017 at 3:51 PM brilliant, lin, in every way! Lin Lane September 3, 2017 at 7:00 PM Thanks ever so much, Ilene.

Charlie Smith September 3, 2017 at 12:29 PM Moderation my dear, make the moments last... Great write. Lin Lane September 3, 2017 at 7:00 PM I never sip from the cup of love anymore, Charlie. It's proven to be too painful. Thanks, dear friend.

Darren White September 3, 2017 at 12:28 PM The metaphor is a strong one, in many ways. but the end is invariably painful. Great poem, Lin. Lin Lane September 3, 2017 at 6:59 PM Thank you for great comments, Darren. I hope you're healing well.

Tim Smith September 3, 2017 at 12:03 PM While drinking from the cup we feel happy until the hangover hits...then it's time to detox Lin Lane September 3, 2017 at 6:59 PM I guess the same after effects would be felt if we're talking literally about alcohol or love...both strong addictions. Thanks a lot, Tim.

Jan Allison September 3, 2017 at 12:00 PM Fabulous allegory being drunk on love and your poem made me think of the song title 'addicted to love' ... and it can be as addictive as any substance and as hard a habit to kick:-( hugs jan xx Lin Lane September 3, 2017 at 6:58 PM It must be hard to kick for so many to have given up so much because of it. I feel like I lost all I needed in life because 'he' wanted to dwell in a potato patch. Thank you, dear one.