Betrayal of the Soul

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Young
Mother
Rocks baby
Singing  happy song
Love in its purity bonding
Daddy slips into the arms of another woman
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Esquire Avatar
February 24, 2010 at 5:34 PM
Dear Sara, My bad! If YOU entered this in Star Flixers s.s.s Contest "Betrayal" Good LUCK I see YOU in the Winner's Circle Congratulations LOVE YOU and YOURS ALWAYS...HG
Esquire Avatar
February 24, 2010 at 5:23 PM
Dear Sara, Superb Write I enjoy this Form and even more so when YOU Write it I have a hard time with the Concept in this Poem Why would a man ever enter another Woman's arms?? LOVE YOU and YOURS ALWAYS...HG
Smith Avatar
February 23, 2010 at 9:08 AM
Hi, this is a truthfully said poem. It happens all the time. Keep Writing! ~ D. Smith
Bien Avatar
February 21, 2010 at 5:05 PM
I like the simplicity of this Sara....JB
Mahrie Avatar
February 16, 2010 at 7:21 AM
a very well Written ...reflection of a true event on social lives
Ford Avatar
February 14, 2010 at 12:21 PM
Eloquently composed and yet a sad but all to frequent truth
Anish Avatar
February 13, 2010 at 5:10 PM
Someone bit into the apple long ago. All too common behavior. Temptation is powerful as you express well in your ode. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish
Chachere Avatar
February 13, 2010 at 10:20 AM
Happens all the time. so sad.. and thank you for your comment Sara. The emotion of her was not angry. i don't think i worded it right. i meant to make the readers feel that though this was a 'too deep decision' she did it because she wanted to make him see.she didn't want to get even. Anyway, your poem reminds me of my parents a while ago. -Always Lynette
Nunn Avatar
February 13, 2010 at 3:30 AM
Very true words and it happens many times in this old world, good write...Thanks on Hard Knocks...sometimes those are good teachers, we seems to remember better??? Thanks Danny
Strand Avatar
February 13, 2010 at 12:48 AM
A too familar tale Sara.Rgds Brian & thank you for your welcome comments.
Delacroix Avatar
February 12, 2010 at 6:38 PM
Oh! OUch...! A horrible betrayal indeed, Sara! A well written poem in this format. Thanks for sharing and thank you for your kind comments on mine. Best wishes, Caroline.
Culverhouse Avatar
February 12, 2010 at 5:28 PM
bad dad!!
Dietrich Avatar
February 12, 2010 at 4:38 PM
oh, wow, this one is really good, sara, I really like this type of poetry! Luv, Andrea
Loving Iii Avatar
February 12, 2010 at 12:48 PM
you need the gun. john
Haick Avatar
February 12, 2010 at 9:35 AM
Same old story, Sara. It never ends. Well-written Fibonacci! Great job! Peace, Audrey
Hilliker Avatar
February 12, 2010 at 6:54 AM
Oh, that's not good, is it? Nicely written. Thanks for sharing.
Guzzi Avatar
February 12, 2010 at 5:53 AM
so sad, some men don't deal well with a new baby? Light & Love
Sweetheart Avatar
February 12, 2010 at 5:29 AM
Wow ... a good entry for the Betrayal contest Sara... luv this one lots... its a message all too often playing out in the world today.. SOUP MAIL... luv.. LInda-Marie
Byrne Avatar
February 12, 2010 at 4:08 AM
Ouch! Powerful!
Moreno Avatar
February 12, 2010 at 3:53 AM
Wow, very emotional piece, excellent work. One for my fav's...Raul
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