Betrayal of the Soul

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Young
Mother
Rocks baby
Singing  happy song
Love in its purity bonding
Daddy slips into the arms of another woman

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 2/24/2010 5:34:00 PM
Dear Sara, My bad! If YOU entered this in Star Flixers s.s.s Contest "Betrayal" Good LUCK I see YOU in the Winner's Circle Congratulations LOVE YOU and YOURS ALWAYS...HG
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Date: 2/24/2010 5:23:00 PM
Dear Sara, Superb Write I enjoy this Form and even more so when YOU Write it I have a hard time with the Concept in this Poem Why would a man ever enter another Woman's arms?? LOVE YOU and YOURS ALWAYS...HG
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Date: 2/23/2010 9:08:00 AM
Hi, this is a truthfully said poem. It happens all the time. Keep Writing! ~ D. Smith
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Date: 2/21/2010 5:05:00 PM
I like the simplicity of this Sara....JB
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Date: 2/16/2010 7:21:00 AM
a very well Written ...reflection of a true event on social lives
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Date: 2/14/2010 12:21:00 PM
Eloquently composed and yet a sad but all to frequent truth
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Date: 2/13/2010 5:10:00 PM
Someone bit into the apple long ago. All too common behavior. Temptation is powerful as you express well in your ode. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish
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Date: 2/13/2010 10:20:00 AM
Happens all the time. so sad.. and thank you for your comment Sara. The emotion of her was not angry. i don't think i worded it right. i meant to make the readers feel that though this was a 'too deep decision' she did it because she wanted to make him see.she didn't want to get even. Anyway, your poem reminds me of my parents a while ago. -Always Lynette
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Date: 2/13/2010 3:30:00 AM
Very true words and it happens many times in this old world, good write...Thanks on Hard Knocks...sometimes those are good teachers, we seems to remember better??? Thanks Danny
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Date: 2/13/2010 12:48:00 AM
A too familar tale Sara.Rgds Brian & thank you for your welcome comments.
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Date: 2/12/2010 6:38:00 PM
Oh! OUch...! A horrible betrayal indeed, Sara! A well written poem in this format. Thanks for sharing and thank you for your kind comments on mine. Best wishes, Caroline.
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Date: 2/12/2010 5:28:00 PM
bad dad!!
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Date: 2/12/2010 4:38:00 PM
oh, wow, this one is really good, sara, I really like this type of poetry! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 2/12/2010 12:48:00 PM
you need the gun. john
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Date: 2/12/2010 9:35:00 AM
Same old story, Sara. It never ends. Well-written Fibonacci! Great job! Peace, Audrey
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Date: 2/12/2010 6:54:00 AM
Oh, that's not good, is it? Nicely written. Thanks for sharing.
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Date: 2/12/2010 5:53:00 AM
so sad, some men don't deal well with a new baby? Light & Love
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Date: 2/12/2010 5:29:00 AM
Wow ... a good entry for the Betrayal contest Sara... luv this one lots... its a message all too often playing out in the world today.. SOUP MAIL... luv.. LInda-Marie
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Date: 2/12/2010 4:08:00 AM
Ouch! Powerful!
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Date: 2/12/2010 3:53:00 AM
Wow, very emotional piece, excellent work. One for my fav's...Raul
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