Jan Allison Poet Rondeau

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Best Rondeau

You crushed my heart then walked away 
I broke down, begging you to stay 
My eyes were filled with bitter tears 
That you’d leave after all these years 
You said our love had had its day 

I’ve got bills that I have to pay 
Gifts to buy for our son’s birthday 
How will I cope, I have such fears 
You crushed my heart

Not another roll in the hay …
My best friend Sue got in the way 
She stole your heart so it appears 
I pray one day my sadness clears 
My whole life is in disarray 
You crushed my heart

Contest Best Rondeau Poem Sponsored by Laura Loo
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Rondeau Rhyme Scheme: AABBA-AABC-AABBAC
07~10~16

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Larry Bradfield July 19, 2016 at 1:01 PM WOW...Congrats on the win! You really laid one out of the park!..Larry Jan Allison August 26, 2016 at 6:26 PM Thanks for dropping by Larry sorry I missed replying sooner:-( hugs jan xx

Teddy Kimathi July 15, 2016 at 5:20 AM Congrats Jan, for your WIN in the contest!! ;-) Jan Allison July 15, 2016 at 5:39 AM Thanks Teddy:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel July 15, 2016 at 3:30 AM Congratulations on your wonderful win, Jan:) Lovely write on heart break:) Jan Allison July 15, 2016 at 5:39 AM Thanks so much Jo:-) Hugs Jan x

Alexis Y. July 14, 2016 at 12:18 PM Hi Jan, I had a feeling I would see you in the winner's circle with this amazing piece. Congrats on your win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis Jan Allison July 14, 2016 at 2:27 PM Thanks Alexis I'm delighted as I've never written this form before:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight July 14, 2016 at 11:46 AM Heart-wrenching write, Jan, and glad it is fiction. Nicely written Rondeau and congrats on your nice placement in the contest! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison July 14, 2016 at 11:50 AM Thanks Sandra I am so pleased to place with my first attempt at this form:-) hugs jan xx

Beautiful Scars July 14, 2016 at 11:45 AM Jan, a wonderful poem and so touching lady, anything you write is so real...congrats on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo Jan Allison July 14, 2016 at 11:48 AM I was delighted to place so well with my first attempt at this form am so glad you liked it:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso July 11, 2016 at 6:04 PM If all it takes is for me to drop a 1000 hats, then consider it done, I look forward to another 1000 beautiful poems as this one! oh wait 999 hats, I stuck a brick in one and dropped it on Sues head! :) Jan Allison July 11, 2016 at 6:09 PM LOL:-) I'm pleased with the way the poem panned out as its my first attempt at this form:-)hugs Jan xx

CayCay Godwin July 10, 2016 at 12:45 PM Well done! So glad it isn't true and I don't need to hire a hit man. Great flow pops this drama right along and I enjoyed it very much. Best of luck in contest and all else ... CayCay Jan Allison July 10, 2016 at 12:49 PM Thanks CayCay I can write happy and sad at the drop of a hat and thankfully this is a fictional write but I'm sure some people can relate to the betrayal by a 'friend':-( hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish July 10, 2016 at 11:24 AM Sounds like you had a tough time. Get your son to teach you to play chess. It is so complex you almost forget your sorrows. I beat the computer yesterday! Matthew Anish Jan Allison July 10, 2016 at 11:56 AM Pure fiction write for the contest:-) I play scrabble with my son I think chess is beyond me :-) hugs jan xx

Sneha Nair July 10, 2016 at 10:33 AM jan...this poem really touched my soul.wonderful read. Jan Allison July 10, 2016 at 10:40 AM Thanks so much Sneha:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Ball July 10, 2016 at 9:36 AM WoW! What a poignant piece this is. Very well thought out and well expressed. Lots of emotion. Wonderful read. God Bless, JB Jan Allison July 10, 2016 at 9:50 AM Thanks Judy its my first attempt at this form I do hope Laura likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong July 10, 2016 at 1:23 AM Excellent Jan...you are on a winning roll and I think this is a poem you can add to your wins too! You crushed my heart! Brilliant line to repeat! 7 ; ) Jan Allison July 10, 2016 at 5:27 AM Thanks Connie its my first attempt at the form I do hope Laura likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper July 9, 2016 at 7:35 PM Jan, you are getting awfully good at writing this style. Good luck in the contest :-) Jan Allison July 9, 2016 at 7:41 PM Its actually my first attempt at the form Eve I do hope I've got it right - I've written similar themes on breaking up in other forms :-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. July 9, 2016 at 6:42 PM Hi Jan, This is a good entry. You expressed a broken heart very well in this piece. Best of luck in the. Contest. A Big seven:-) Alexis Jan Allison July 9, 2016 at 6:59 PM Thanks Alexis - I haven't been active on soup much recently - hopefully I am back to full strength now:-) hugs Jan xx