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Beneath the Void

In this downpour of nil a blinding fog descended and a venomous, absinthe-mindedness wrapped all over me, thus all of my senses were out of order.

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Cheryl Koko Koomoa

Date: 6/5/2016 7:23:00 AM

Yes, now a much better title:) It's a sweet write!

Cheryl Koko Koomoa

Date: 6/5/2016 6:54:00 AM

I like the poem,but I'd re-title it. It was a title that doesn't draw readers.and that's sad when it said so much within this form.i read it because I saw that it is a Choka. A delightful form!( my opinion)

Diana Bosa
Date: 6/5/2016 7:11:00 AM

Thank you so much! :-))) About the title I likewise felt the same. Now I changed it, maybe it'll work better with the new one. (I do like the choka form too. :-) )