Beneath the Void

In this downpour of 
nil a blinding fog descended
and a venomous,

absinthe-mindedness wrapped all 
over me, thus all of my 
senses were out of order.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Koomoa  Avatar
June 5, 2016 at 7:23 AM
Yes, now a much better title:) It's a sweet write!
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June 5, 2016 at 6:54 AM
I like the poem,but I'd re-title it. It was a title that doesn't draw readers.and that's sad when it said so much within this form.i read it because I saw that it is a Choka. A delightful form!( my opinion)
Bosa Avatar
June 5, 2016 at 7:11 AM
Thank you so much! :-))) About the title I likewise felt the same. Now I changed it, maybe it'll work better with the new one. (I do like the choka form too. :-) )
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