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Below We Two

(For "Focus on Syllables" contest, by Catie Lindsey) Below we two, a wondrous view Lay below, for it was spread With jasmine blossoms white and red; And bluebells nodding in the breeze Nearby weeping willow trees. We stood there on that hill - Amazed that time stood still. We stood between the day and night, A radiant light in our sight, Sun that had begun to slide Beyond our small hill’s western side. We watched it touch down, saw it gild All the flowers in the field. When all the world was good, On verge of dusk we stood. When time moved on, it found us then Asleep in our old spot, a glen. Tired at last, we’d made our way That moonless night, until we lay In darkening serenity. Then awakened, we would see The whispering of dawn As precious time moved on. . .

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 8/14/2020 10:55:00 PM
My day ends with a smile on my face from all the magical poetry of yours I have read today, with this one lingering in my thoughts. Thank you for giving so generously of your poetic vision to the people of Soup. These gifts from 10 years ago are still paying dividends. God bless you, Andrea ~ John
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Date: 8/15/2020 1:43:00 PM
Thanks so much, John. For all your upbeat comments. That was funny in your other comment how you did not enjoy double spacing of sonnets. What do you think of dividing them up into stanzas? and sometimes unconventional stanzas?
Date: 11/20/2014 8:07:00 AM
Just a stunning write! You are so talented.
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Date: 3/17/2011 8:16:00 AM
Congrats on making it past the first round Andrea X two!!
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Date: 3/7/2011 12:28:00 PM
Many congrats on your well deserved three first round successes Andrea - luv Janette
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Date: 3/7/2011 10:23:00 AM
wonderfull words, wonderfull lady, all the best.
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Date: 3/6/2011 6:58:00 PM
A huge congrats on three of your poems making it to the first round of the poetrysoup contest, Andrea! luv Carol
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Date: 3/6/2011 6:10:00 PM
Congrats Andrea on your first round success in the Poetry Soup contest luv..
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Date: 12/14/2010 1:18:00 PM
Really great poem deserves to be featured Andrea, can't wait to see more.
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Date: 12/14/2010 7:19:00 AM
Congrats on your feature Andrea! Lovely as always... Lay
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Date: 12/14/2010 3:31:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week on PoetrySoup Andrea. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/13/2010 5:55:00 PM
beautiful poem, enjoyed the rhythm and choice of rhymes
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Date: 12/13/2010 5:13:00 PM
Wish this had been in my Time contest. Beautiful..congrats on being featured. BG
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Date: 12/13/2010 3:14:00 PM
Congrats on this selectiion, Andrea. I so much admire your ability to rhyme and without the least feeling of desperation. the words fall into place so naturally. This is certainly one of my favorites. Love, Dave
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Date: 12/12/2010 4:51:00 PM
Congrats Andrea on your featured poem this week on the Soup... a wonderful one to share with us all my friend with luv..
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Date: 11/8/2010 5:39:00 AM
What a beautiful poem this is. I love your words. Many congratulations dear Andrea for this win.
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Date: 11/7/2010 8:19:00 AM
Congrats Andrea my friend on your big win in the syllables contest with this excellent entry and amazing write .. enjoy victory today so sweet this happy Sunday with lots of luv..
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Date: 11/6/2010 12:46:00 PM
Congratulations Andrea on your worthy poem placement in the top ten. Agape, Moses
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Date: 11/6/2010 9:59:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Andrea in Catie's contest "Focus on Syllables". Love, Carol
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Date: 11/6/2010 8:26:00 AM
I would have moved this to the top of the list, such a lovely poem, Andrea! Congratulations!
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Date: 11/6/2010 7:59:00 AM
Congratulations on this well deserved win, Andrea
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Date: 11/6/2010 7:47:00 AM
I must have missed this gem while I was traveling, Andrea, but it's wonderful! I love the way you open it and describe the way you spend this wondrous day with your companion. Congrats on your win! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 10/24/2010 6:46:00 AM
thankxxx Andrea for your terrific and uplifting comments on my poetry today.. yes there is another Halloween in Heaven contest by a Tony Brook who calls himself the Dark Poet on Soup and Francine made me aware of it when I read her entry last night.. so I got right in and wrote something ... good luck if u enter my friend.. happy day..with luv..
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Date: 10/21/2010 2:30:00 PM
Sorry, Andrea, my laptop was acting up. Dave
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Date: 10/21/2010 2:28:00 PM
This is a very relaxing fantasy trip, like being on a blown cloud, looking down. Love, Dave
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Date: 10/21/2010 2:27:00 PM
This is a very relaxing fantasy trip, like being on a blown cloud, looking down. Love, Dave
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