Bees Haiku

solitary bees - freedom sampled, but never a taste of honey - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - 5 - 7 - 5 syllable count https://www.howmanysyllables.com/ Birds or Bees Haiku Contest Hosted by Tania Kitchin © 20th June 2019

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Angela Crabtree

Date: 12/1/2020 7:16:00 PM

This is cute, Paul. You are very good at these :)

Paul Callus
Date: 12/3/2020 2:06:00 AM

Thank you, Angela; you're too kind. Regards // paul

Valerie Staton

Date: 10/18/2019 4:15:00 AM

A very clever haiku. I read it over and over again!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/3/2020 2:06:00 AM

Thank you Valerie. I'm sorry I missed your comment and thus am replying after such a long time! Hope you're keeping well :) // paul

J.W. Earnings

Date: 8/2/2019 6:36:00 AM

Reading this again...it is amazing!:)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/2/2019 7:51:00 AM

Thank you, JW; double visits are doubly appreciated :) Regards // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/19/2019 6:57:00 AM

Got a chuckle but then again it might not bee funny..Sara..Thanks for dropping by...

Paul Callus
Date: 7/20/2019 9:18:00 AM

Thank you, Sara :) Always so lovely to have you visiting. Enjoy the weekend. // paul

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

Date: 7/12/2019 2:41:00 AM

This is a very good and clever Haiku Paul! I think it's great. I'm not sure of the results but you should carry the day with this gem. Nice work! MC

Paul Callus
Date: 7/13/2019 8:25:00 AM

Thank you, Marquis. It's a pity you were not on the judging panel, my friend :) Best regards // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 7/9/2019 1:18:00 PM

oh, I love this - very clever

Paul Callus
Date: 7/9/2019 4:51:00 PM

PLeased you found it to your liking, my friend; thank you. Regards // paul

J.W. Earnings

Date: 7/7/2019 2:13:00 AM

Cool poem about bees and anything related to it. I enjoyed reading it this evening...

Paul Callus
Date: 7/7/2019 5:01:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by, JW. Have a nice day. Regards // paul

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 7/3/2019 1:25:00 PM

Dear Paul, this lovely haiku is written in the style of a classical master - such wit and the surprise twist at the end! Excellent piece that is bound to take a top placement! Best regards. Pandita

Paul Callus
Date: 7/3/2019 4:08:00 PM

Thank you for your complimentary feedback, Pandita. It's been a pleasure crossing paths today. Warm regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/1/2019 1:06:00 AM

Wow this is clever Paul. I had to read it twice. This should receive honors in the contest! : ) xxoo

Paul Callus
Date: 7/1/2019 3:22:00 PM

Thank you, Connie. Even haiku need to be sampled and tasted:) Unfortunately this one only managed an n/a. Warm regards // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/29/2019 1:12:00 AM

And solitary bees are normally in danger of silly humans swiping them dead! You taught me something here Paul, did not know this, I know now that they only collect pollen to provision their nests. Very clever and insightful as usual. Good luck in the contest my dear friend. Warm regards, Jenny.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/29/2019 2:30:00 PM

You have the ability to read my mind without any difficulty, Jenny :) Thank you for your lovely visit...much appreciated my friend. ~Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/23/2019 8:24:00 AM

Poor little bees. Well expressed Paul, this is also true for us worker bees. The ones at the top enjoy the honey and convince us that we are the Benefactors of our labour.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/23/2019 8:37:00 AM

So true, Richard...except that solitary bees are cleverer than us, and refuse to take part in producing honey! ~ Regards // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/22/2019 10:40:00 PM

greeat twist of which you are a master, paul...a winner for me!...huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 6/23/2019 5:24:00 AM

You are too kind, dear Nette!! Thank you. Hugs // paul

Kelly Deschler

Date: 6/22/2019 9:24:00 PM

Which is sweeter, indeed! ... There is wisdom and much to ponder on here in so few words... Very well written Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 6/23/2019 5:15:00 AM

Thank you for your lovely feedback, Kelly. Hope you are keeping well, my friend. Enjoy the weekend. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/22/2019 8:26:00 PM

I like how you made this one about a solitary bee. Seems metaphorical

Paul Callus
Date: 6/23/2019 4:58:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea. I was determined not to fall in the trap of presenting beautiful imagery; yes, it could be metaphorical as well...I leave it to the reader to elicit whatever s/he can out of it. Regards // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 6/22/2019 6:31:00 PM

great imagery and feeling in your verse, Paul … Hugs Eve

Paul Callus
Date: 6/23/2019 4:53:00 AM

Thank you, Eve. Pleased you enjoyed. Hugs // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/21/2019 12:16:00 PM

Wow! You are so clever in the haiku form, Paul. And it's kind of sad that those who produce the honey, don't get to eat it. Best wishes in Tania's contest! Love, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 6/21/2019 2:05:00 PM

Thank you dear Carolyn...you are too kind! Your visits are always much appreciated. ~ love // paul

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/20/2019 10:04:00 PM

Choices, choices: Freedom or honey?! (I'll take honey... Ha, ha: I'm not a solitary bee). This is exquisitely done, Paul. A winner for me (too). Best wishes, Gershon

Paul Callus
Date: 6/21/2019 1:55:00 PM

That is the beauty of freedom, Gershon....the possibility of making choices! Thank you for stopping by. Regards // paul

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 6/20/2019 9:48:00 PM

Oh cool ku! A winner for me :))$ Good luck! xomo

Paul Callus
Date: 6/21/2019 1:53:00 PM

Thank you for the faith you show in it, Maureen:) Best regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/20/2019 7:29:00 PM

Wow! Great one!

Paul Callus
Date: 6/21/2019 1:51:00 PM

Thank you, Kim! Enjoy the weekend. Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 6/20/2019 6:43:00 PM

Your wonderful Haiku is striking in its bittersweet irony, Paul. Your artistry and keen intellect are a potent force, my dear friend. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes and hugs for you.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 6/21/2019 1:50:00 PM

Thank you for the generous comments, Susan. They are truly appreciated. Hope you have a lovely weekend, my friend. Warm regards & hugs // paul