Bees Haiku

solitary bees -

freedom sampled, but never

a taste of honey


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Birds or Bees Haiku Contest
Hosted by Tania Kitchin
© 20th June 2019

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Angela Crabtree

December 1, 2020 at 7:16 PM

This is cute, Paul. You are very good at these :)

Paul Callus

December 3, 2020 at 2:06 AM

Thank you, Angela; you're too kind. Regards // paul

Valerie Staton

October 18, 2019 at 4:15 AM

A very clever haiku. I read it over and over again!

Paul Callus

December 3, 2020 at 2:06 AM

Thank you Valerie. I'm sorry I missed your comment and thus am replying after such a long time! Hope you're keeping well :) // paul

David William Breidenthal

August 2, 2019 at 6:36 AM

Reading this again...it is amazing!:)

Paul Callus

August 2, 2019 at 7:51 AM

Thank you, JW; double visits are doubly appreciated :) Regards // paul

Sara Kendrick

July 19, 2019 at 6:57 AM

Got a chuckle but then again it might not bee funny..Sara..Thanks for dropping by...

Paul Callus

July 20, 2019 at 9:18 AM

Thank you, Sara :) Always so lovely to have you visiting. Enjoy the weekend. // paul

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

July 12, 2019 at 2:41 AM

This is a very good and clever Haiku Paul! I think it's great. I'm not sure of the results but you should carry the day with this gem. Nice work! MC

Paul Callus

July 13, 2019 at 8:25 AM

Thank you, Marquis. It's a pity you were not on the judging panel, my friend :) Best regards // paul

Jack Horne

July 9, 2019 at 1:18 PM

oh, I love this - very clever

Paul Callus

July 9, 2019 at 4:51 PM

PLeased you found it to your liking, my friend; thank you. Regards // paul

David William Breidenthal

July 7, 2019 at 2:13 AM

Cool poem about bees and anything related to it. I enjoyed reading it this evening...

Paul Callus

July 7, 2019 at 5:01 AM

Thank you for stopping by, JW. Have a nice day. Regards // paul

Pandita Sietesantos

July 3, 2019 at 1:25 PM

Dear Paul, this lovely haiku is written in the style of a classical master - such wit and the surprise twist at the end! Excellent piece that is bound to take a top placement! Best regards. Pandita

Paul Callus

July 3, 2019 at 4:08 PM

Thank you for your complimentary feedback, Pandita. It's been a pleasure crossing paths today. Warm regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

July 1, 2019 at 1:06 AM

Wow this is clever Paul. I had to read it twice. This should receive honors in the contest! : ) xxoo

Paul Callus

July 1, 2019 at 3:22 PM

Thank you, Connie. Even haiku need to be sampled and tasted:) Unfortunately this one only managed an n/a. Warm regards // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

June 29, 2019 at 1:12 AM

And solitary bees are normally in danger of silly humans swiping them dead! You taught me something here Paul, did not know this, I know now that they only collect pollen to provision their nests. Very clever and insightful as usual. Good luck in the contest my dear friend. Warm regards, Jenny.

Paul Callus

June 29, 2019 at 2:30 PM

You have the ability to read my mind without any difficulty, Jenny :) Thank you for your lovely visit...much appreciated my friend. ~Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Richard Lamoureux

June 23, 2019 at 8:24 AM

Poor little bees. Well expressed Paul, this is also true for us worker bees. The ones at the top enjoy the honey and convince us that we are the Benefactors of our labour.

Paul Callus

June 23, 2019 at 8:37 AM

So true, Richard...except that solitary bees are cleverer than us, and refuse to take part in producing honey! ~ Regards // paul

Nette Onclaud

June 22, 2019 at 10:40 PM

greeat twist of which you are a master, paul...a winner for me!...huggs

Paul Callus

June 23, 2019 at 5:24 AM

You are too kind, dear Nette!! Thank you. Hugs // paul

Kelly Deschler

June 22, 2019 at 9:24 PM

Which is sweeter, indeed! ... There is wisdom and much to ponder on here in so few words... Very well written Paul!

Paul Callus

June 23, 2019 at 5:15 AM

Thank you for your lovely feedback, Kelly. Hope you are keeping well, my friend. Enjoy the weekend. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

June 22, 2019 at 8:26 PM

I like how you made this one about a solitary bee. Seems metaphorical

Paul Callus

June 23, 2019 at 4:58 AM

Thank you, Andrea. I was determined not to fall in the trap of presenting beautiful imagery; yes, it could be metaphorical as well...I leave it to the reader to elicit whatever s/he can out of it. Regards // paul

Eve Roper

June 22, 2019 at 6:31 PM

great imagery and feeling in your verse, Paul … Hugs Eve

Paul Callus

June 23, 2019 at 4:53 AM

Thank you, Eve. Pleased you enjoyed. Hugs // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

June 21, 2019 at 12:16 PM

Wow! You are so clever in the haiku form, Paul. And it's kind of sad that those who produce the honey, don't get to eat it. Best wishes in Tania's contest! Love, Carolyn

Paul Callus

June 21, 2019 at 2:05 PM

Thank you dear Carolyn...you are too kind! Your visits are always much appreciated. ~ love // paul

Gershon Wolf

June 20, 2019 at 10:04 PM

Choices, choices: Freedom or honey?! (I'll take honey... Ha, ha: I'm not a solitary bee). This is exquisitely done, Paul. A winner for me (too). Best wishes, Gershon

Paul Callus

June 21, 2019 at 1:55 PM

That is the beauty of freedom, Gershon....the possibility of making choices! Thank you for stopping by. Regards // paul

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

June 20, 2019 at 9:48 PM

Oh cool ku! A winner for me :))$ Good luck! xomo

Paul Callus

June 21, 2019 at 1:53 PM

Thank you for the faith you show in it, Maureen:) Best regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues

June 20, 2019 at 7:29 PM

Wow! Great one!

Paul Callus

June 21, 2019 at 1:51 PM

Thank you, Kim! Enjoy the weekend. Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

June 20, 2019 at 6:43 PM

Your wonderful Haiku is striking in its bittersweet irony, Paul. Your artistry and keen intellect are a potent force, my dear friend. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes and hugs for you.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

June 21, 2019 at 1:50 PM

Thank you for the generous comments, Susan. They are truly appreciated. Hope you have a lovely weekend, my friend. Warm regards & hugs // paul

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