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Beauty Fell Upon Me

Beauty fell upon me as the snow upon the trees, Then carried me to distant dream, of autumn's gentle breeze. Written for the Rhyme Battle 6 Contest (Couplet) Mel

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Casarah Nance

Date: 4/23/2014 7:28:00 PM

since we are in competition for this contest i will keep my lips under lock and key ;-P for now...

Casarah Nance
Date: 4/24/2014 8:43:00 AM

silly, of course good luck, i am so far below you i can see the dirt on your the bottom of yours shoes. Your the tops babe

Mel Merrill
Date: 4/24/2014 1:08:00 AM

Dude--I mean babe. Don't even. Get out while you still have some dignity. Don't play on my field! No, must be a good sport and say, good luck! Xo ;-)

Ana Espinola Collins

Date: 4/23/2014 5:34:00 PM

I love this poem...Short, sweet and beautiful :) Ana

Mel Merrill
Date: 4/24/2014 1:04:00 AM

Thank you Ana. It's short alright, but that's the contest rule. Might add to it one day, however. Glad you liked this, and I appreciate the kind words. Hugs Mel :)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 4/21/2014 9:10:00 PM

No contest to me at all, this is winner either way! Great write!!!

Mel Merrill
Date: 4/21/2014 11:48:00 PM

Thanks Arthur. Here's an idea, you be the judge! Thanks for the support. Mel :)

Cherl Dunn

Date: 4/21/2014 6:50:00 PM

Very pretty, free and easy enjoyed this simply and light write here, cheri also thank you for commenting on my father write, take care

Mel Merrill
Date: 4/21/2014 11:50:00 PM

Thank you, so much. I'm ashamed to admit this, but I read the contest criteria, and wrote the couplet in about one minute--or less. Just came to me. Go figure. Love your writes. Hugs, Mel :)

Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 4/21/2014 5:36:00 PM

Great imagery here in these two lines. As a male, I'm sure you and I can relate to possibly bringing our lovely ladies to this remote area for a romantic walk!

Mel Merrill
Date: 4/21/2014 11:52:00 PM

Lol. Let's do, only leave the gun at home :) Thanks for the visit, my friend--and the encouragement--need it. I'll be around. Mel :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/21/2014 4:03:00 PM

Ahh!! Reads like a winner to me..I enjoyed this one..I like the flow, rhyme, rhythm, and the quality of this poetic short one..Sara

Mel Merrill
Date: 4/21/2014 11:54:00 PM

Short and sweet, I guess. Came to me in a hurry, but I knew when it was done. It's done. Thanks for reading it--and liking it. Mel :)

Jan Allison

Date: 4/21/2014 2:08:00 PM

beautifully written Mel I know it will do well in the contest. Hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 4/21/2014 2:57:00 PM

Have mailed you, hugs Jan x

Mel Merrill
Date: 4/21/2014 2:38:00 PM

Jan, how are you? This was an afterthought. I wanted people to read the love poem, but that's not my call. Thanks, though. Love your stuff, btw. Peace and blessings, Mel :)

Toquyen Harrell

Date: 4/21/2014 11:47:00 AM

Sounds like it did! You are mesmerized :)

Mel Merrill
Date: 4/21/2014 2:40:00 PM

Not entirely, but almost. Just trying to paint a picture; glad you could see it. Thank you, Mel :)

Keith O.J. Hunt

Date: 4/21/2014 11:37:00 AM

Much is said in 2 lines, great imagery and suggestion Mel!

Mel Merrill
Date: 4/21/2014 2:41:00 PM

Thanks, Keith. Like your stuff, man. You're good. have a great day, my friend. Mel :)

Sam Toil

Date: 4/21/2014 8:56:00 AM

Hi Mel. You say a lot about beauty in these two simple, well-written lines. How it overwhelms us as it crawls through our awareness impacting our entire mind in a most pleasing way. It is so important to our lives, and yet it is undefinable. Except through allegory such as your wonderful poem here. Peace...Sam

Mel Merrill
Date: 4/21/2014 2:44:00 PM

Thanks Sam--a family name, as I mentioned--my Uncle's and Grandfather's names. I very much appreciate the thoughtful and insightful comment. You're a great poet, so I am encouraged by your words. Thanks again, Mel

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 4/21/2014 8:01:00 AM

Oh, those Merrill genes are simmering! Good one and Ill look for you on the winners list. BG

Mel Merrill
Date: 4/21/2014 2:46:00 PM

You can look, but I don't think you'll find me. Oh well, I got the #1 new poet thing, so I'm good. Keep in touch, cuz. Mel :)