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2/8/2025 for 8 By 5 Poetry Contest sponsored by Joseph May

Youth, I think it's time, on your bike to climb to rapture sublime. Feel wind on your face, freedom to embrace, so that you may fly. Watch the world go by - on your two-wheeled high! Turn left or turn right to a newfound site. The sun's a delight, a shining jewel. A beach trip is cool. Take the day off school and your pleasure, chase. Youth, you must embrace.

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Joseph May

Date: 2/19/2025 6:17:00 AM

Congrats on your win, Nicely done

David Crandall
Date: 2/19/2025 8:22:00 AM

Thanks Joseph looking forward to the next one!

Terry Miller

Date: 2/19/2025 12:56:00 AM

Fun poem, congratulations

David Crandall
Date: 2/19/2025 8:22:00 AM

Thanks Terry!

CayCay Jennings

Date: 2/12/2025 5:06:00 PM

Delightful, took me on a gleeful, bouncy ride. Made me smile ... CayCay

David Crandall
Date: 2/12/2025 5:53:00 PM

Thanks, I used to love riding my bike!

Valsa George

Date: 2/10/2025 12:04:00 AM

I like your advice. But as a teacher, absconding classes is greatly objected. :) I am sure, as a youth, you must have undertaken similar adventures. Great entry for the contest. All the best, dear David.

David Crandall
Date: 2/10/2025 8:09:00 AM

Yep, it's based on my youth, and my memories of my youth. I would never advice anyone to take my path. I dropped out of high school, moved out, worked on horrible jobs, and somehow, found myself in college with a math degree. I had to learn the hard way that an education is important. I think this poem contains a fallacy, it implies that education and fun are either/or. You can have both!

Heidi Sands

Date: 2/9/2025 7:03:00 AM

A fun poem. Great one :)

David Crandall
Date: 2/9/2025 10:40:00 AM

Thanks Heidi!

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 2/9/2025 6:24:00 AM

Never had the nerve to take a day off school, yet I think your advice is cool. Everyone should be free to live life happy as a bumble bee… Beryl

David Crandall
Date: 2/9/2025 10:40:00 AM

Aw, too bad. I never broke a rule until the last week of ninth grade, then I broke the rule all the time, and cut class too much, but I did have some great bike rides!

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 2/9/2025 12:11:00 AM

I like this poem, but I thought you had been a teacher. Take a day off school? I had thought I'd be struck by lightning.

David Crandall
Date: 2/9/2025 10:39:00 AM

I got my teaching credential, but did not teach until I tutored on a part time basis at Mathnasium, post-retirement, but yeah, probably not good advice, though, once in a while, I think it's ok to break the rules to have a little fun. I broke the rules too much in high school, cutting class. I would have been upset if my son was like me -lol.

Akham Nilabirdhwaja Singh

Date: 2/8/2025 8:27:00 PM

Freedom and joy of the youth very nicely penned the poem.Wish the best.

David Crandall
Date: 2/8/2025 9:33:00 PM

Thanks Akham, the best to you as well!