Batter Up

The air was full, pregnant, shivering with anticipation. All of nature held its breath. The trees stood their small branches, like eyelashes tensely open, waiting for the day to blink.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/8/2013 11:52:00 PM

this is awesome, Debs. Congrats on a well deserved win.

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 6/8/2013 3:49:00 PM

Debbie congratulations on your excellent win. Warm Smiles, Connie

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/8/2013 11:52:00 AM

Congratulations!!! Debbie, nice to see you on Nates' winning list. By the looks of his winners, it seems as if he's a real picky person.... xox~ Linda

Monterey Sirak

Date: 6/8/2013 10:17:00 AM

Awesome poem! You brought nature to life. Well deserved win.

Joseph May

Date: 6/8/2013 5:31:00 AM

congrats on a great win

Nathan D.

Date: 6/7/2013 8:30:00 PM

thank you

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/30/2011 5:31:00 AM

Congratulations Debbie on your win in the contest. Love, Carol

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/27/2011 6:04:00 PM

This is incredible,Deb.Finally getting to some of these winner lists hidden way in the back. I wish they were up front where people could readily see them! The eyelashes line was awesome. congrats. I think this is one I either "blinked" and missed it, or I simply lost!!

Carrie Richards

Date: 6/24/2011 8:29:00 AM

Love "eyelashes" open!!! Great way to express the beginning of a day!! :) Congrats!!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 6/24/2011 8:00:00 AM

Congrats Debbie on your first place win with this expressive entry luv.. another great prize for u ..

Kash Poet

Date: 6/24/2011 7:37:00 AM

An excellent poem with nice use of metaphors.Congrats on your 1st place win Debbie.

Kash Poet

Date: 6/24/2011 7:33:00 AM

An excellent poem with nice use of metaphors.Congrats on your 1st place win Debbie.

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 3/21/2010 5:16:00 AM

Congrats on the feature. Days seem to be blinking quicker now. Vince

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 3/17/2010 7:01:00 AM

Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Deb. Love, Carol

Daver Austin

Date: 3/16/2010 5:36:00 AM

A fine captured moment. Congrats on this selection. Love, daver

Brian Strand

Date: 3/15/2010 12:56:00 AM

Congrats on your featured poem today Debbie.Rgds Brian

Ernilando Tugaff

Date: 3/14/2010 10:40:00 PM

Nice poem in a personification form. Congratulations on being featured. God bless. Ernilando

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/14/2010 5:51:00 PM

Congrats Debbie on your featured poem this week on the Soup.. an excellent choice from an excellent poetess...luv.. Linda-Marie

Carrie Richards

Date: 3/14/2010 12:56:00 PM

Wow......how did I miss this little gem?? I love the personifcation of the tree branches...what a delightful way to think of this whole scene!! Awesome poem, Deborah....so glad I caught it among the featured poems this week! Congrats!!! Hugs...Carrie

Robin L. Gass

Date: 2/15/2009 12:02:00 PM

The title suits this intense write perfectly. Right from that catching first line. I held my breath, too, while I read this! :) Love and hugs, Robin

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/24/2008 2:28:00 PM

Thanks for the positive read George and James

George Anos

Date: 9/23/2008 5:13:00 PM

AMAZING PERSONIFICATION! for a moment i thought the tree outside smiled... :o)

James Foulk

Date: 9/23/2008 1:52:00 PM

what a poem this was to read. loved it all the way to end. such color, and warmth it carried.