Barrier

Barrier


Shivering in the high mountain draft,  I saw her naked sweating body below.
Suddenly she dove into a mirror of sky and descended ever so slow.

Wildly she floated, suspended in the sunlight's golden beam.
Dazzled by her radiance my heart leaped after and dissolved into the pool like a dream.

Vigorously swimming, she fluttered my heart with every stroke of measure.
Caressing cold water sent waves of passion to my limbs but to hers only darts of leisure.

Emerging she shivered as passing clouds cooled the fiery dragon's breath.
Off she shook the clinging water, casting my heart drops to their death.

Suddenly gusting winds dispersed the clouds and she sweated once more in the sun.
The chilly gusts bit into my sweat covered flesh and left me as I had begun.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 3/7/2010 10:38:00 PM
This poem goes to my favz.Great work..full of imagination,passion,longing,barriers and more..bravo.and Welcome to Our soup site...Charma:)
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Date: 3/4/2010 6:36:00 PM
Sounds like quite an illusion, Tom, or perhaps an allucination? :) But you did so well writing it. Thanks for sharing and thank you for your very nice comments on "Arrows" part 1 and part 2. Welcome to the Soup. Best wishes, Caroline.
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Date: 2/27/2010 1:45:00 PM
OK Thomas K., I am amazed by your poetry. I had heard you were wonderful and brilliant. But your words are more powerful and beautiful than I could have imagined. I will be reading more of your work. So keep writing! You have a talent that perhaps you didn't know about...or did you? Anyway, I enjoyed this poem. I am off to see another. Keep writing. Lovingly, Dane Ann
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Date: 2/26/2010 6:47:00 AM
This was quite a vision - GRAB! Hey! You be one passionate dude! Welcome to the soup. Love, daver
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Date: 2/25/2010 4:39:00 PM
Nice couplet rhyme Thomas and very vivid and visual .. wonderful words of description here and so enjoyed reading.. luv.. "Sweetheart"
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Date: 2/25/2010 1:55:00 PM
First poem i have read of yours Thomas, if the others are going to be as good as this > we are in for wonderful reading >>wonderful start here >> James
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Date: 2/25/2010 1:35:00 PM
There is such a sense of longing in this poem, Tom. I like the way you used the sights and souns of nature to describe your vision of this woman. The third verse is heartwrenching. Hope you are doing well. Best wishes for success on Poetry Soup.
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Date: 2/21/2010 6:42:00 AM
very poetic
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