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1/31/2025 for Five Lines-Short And Sweet Poetry Contest sponsored by Oliver McKeithan

Bakery

bak'ry
sweet panoply
pick a number and wait
anticipation, sal'vation
heaven

foodcinquain

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Me Me

February 7, 2025 at 9:09 PM

Imagining the smell of freshly baked pumpernickel bread, takes me bake when I was a child..Good write…

David Crandall

February 8, 2025 at 8:10 AM

Thanks, mmm, pumpernickel - that sounds good!

Jan Allison

February 4, 2025 at 2:36 AM

Most of our bakery's have closed David but I love the aroma of freshly baked bread and do make it for hubby from time to time - not with a bread machine either! congrats on POTD hugs Jan xx

David Crandall

February 4, 2025 at 7:24 AM

About 60 years ago, I used to beg my mom to bake bread. I guess that means you have to do all that kneading. I think maybe what I like especially is that yeast smell. I'm not sure.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

February 3, 2025 at 4:55 AM

Hello David, this is a feast in five lines—every syllable kneaded with meaning. I love how you’ve distilled indulgence, longing, and something almost sacred into a bite-sized masterpiece. Few words, yet they rise with flavor. Brilliant work and Congrats on POTD. Winter Blessings, MY Friend, Daniel

David Crandall

February 3, 2025 at 9:48 AM

Haha, thanks Daniel, your reviews are a cinnamon roll, fresh from the oven!

thriveni c mysore

February 2, 2025 at 11:37 PM

since 2600 BC, none had called Bakery as heaven! Dear friend, you look so good in the spotlight. Bask in sweetness. Congratulations on POTD. Three cheers!!!

David Crandall

February 3, 2025 at 1:17 PM

haha, thanks, Thriveni - wow, that is a long time! hmm, did someone call a bakery heaven in 2600 BC -lol?

Karen Jones

February 2, 2025 at 2:29 PM

Congrats on your sweet potd!

David Crandall

February 2, 2025 at 2:30 PM

haha, thanks Karen!

Benjamin Bartley

February 2, 2025 at 2:09 PM

I could use a nice French pastry shop nearer by. Congrats! A well-deserved poem, poet! Of course, any of your poems qualify! Ha!

David Crandall

February 2, 2025 at 2:20 PM

Thanks so much Benjamin!

John Read

February 2, 2025 at 10:43 AM

Congratulations David on your well deserved POTD.

David Crandall

February 2, 2025 at 12:29 PM

Thanks John!

Gershon Wolf

February 2, 2025 at 9:37 AM

Nothing like savoring the aroma and taste of freshly baked bread, is there? Spot on, David, and congratulations on POTD. ~ Gershon

David Crandall

February 2, 2025 at 12:30 PM

Agreed - thanks Gershon! Neither here nor there, but for 27 years, I worked in a neighborhood with great bakeries, and then lived in another neighborhood with great bakeries, but I forgot to scope out the bakeries near my retirement community. Oh well, probably better for my waist line.

Andrea Dietrich

February 2, 2025 at 9:21 AM

Hey congrats. A potd. I think bakeries are heaven too!

David Crandall

February 2, 2025 at 12:37 PM

Thanks Andrea!

Brandy Nicole

February 2, 2025 at 8:38 AM

I soooo love that sweet aroma while waiting on a tasty treat. :) Now I'm in the mood for a warm chocolate chip cookie. Your thoughts bring a smile. Congratulations David, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. :) Hugs, Brandy

Arlo Parker

February 2, 2025 at 8:04 PM

Just made a chili, creamed corn cornbread myself, DC. Banana oats...hmmmm....next? Ha, ha, ha.

David Crandall

February 2, 2025 at 1:04 PM

Thanks Brandy, and yes, those cookies sound good! I've been doing some simple baking. My problem is I can't stop eating once I start. Last week was scones. I just finished some cornbread, and tomorrow, it's banana oat squares.

Brandy Nicole

February 2, 2025 at 12:40 PM

: ) Smiling at you. Baking is easy to do . . .

Paula Goldsmith

February 2, 2025 at 7:54 AM

Congratulations on your POTD win. I enjoyed reading your sweet "Bakery" write. Wish I had some. Have a fun day as you write away..................

David Crandall

February 2, 2025 at 8:25 AM

Thanks Paula! I think I'm going to start taking a survey of the local bakeries in my new neighborhood - lol

Arlo Parker

February 2, 2025 at 7:44 AM

Perfect recipe. Congrats! :o))

David Crandall

February 2, 2025 at 8:19 AM

Thanks, Arlo, I guess a little anticipation makes it taste better :-)

Heidi Sands

February 2, 2025 at 6:30 AM

Congratulations for POTD :)

David Crandall

February 2, 2025 at 8:18 AM

Thanks Heidi!

Kim Rodrigues

February 2, 2025 at 5:02 AM

Congrats on POTD!

David Crandall

February 2, 2025 at 8:18 AM

Welcome back - thanks!

Regina Mcintosh

February 2, 2025 at 3:20 AM

Congrats on POTD. God bless you. love, Gina

David Crandall

February 2, 2025 at 8:17 AM

Thanks Regina!

Tania Kitchin

February 2, 2025 at 3:13 AM

David, I agree, bakeries smell and tase like heaven. Congratulations on POTD.

David Crandall

February 2, 2025 at 8:17 AM

Thanks Tania! to me, bakeries taste and smell good, but also all the different pastries, breads, and cookies all seem to look really great too, all having different designs and colors.