Away On a Desert

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June.18.2023

Away in a Manger Contest Re Run Poetry Contest

Sponsor- Jan Allison

Placed Second

Away on a desert No one in close sight Trudging miles on bare foot, We reached our planned site. Sand dunes peeked here and there. Camels with belled neck Were seen slowly moving, With their humpy back Sky turned black and inky. But moon shone quite bright. Rocks were seen in chrome red, In the glow of light. The desert sand stretched wide. Looked dazzling at night. A land dry and sterile, Lay blazed in moon light. Near a huge tawny rock, Were plants in flower, Thriving in arid space. Saw elf owls cower. What a world of wonder! Sure, a thrilling trip Enjoyed it every bit. From mind, it won't slip!

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Kim Merryman

Date: 8/1/2023 6:36:00 PM

Wonderful imagery, Valsa! An enjoyable read! Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M

Jan Allison

Date: 7/31/2023 8:29:00 AM

Beautifully penned Valsa, I had to dock a point as neck and back dont rhyme. Many congrats on your placement and thanks for taking time to enter the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Valsa George
Date: 7/31/2023 9:38:00 PM

Thanks Jan for the contest and for giving the placement

Paige Hind

Date: 7/18/2023 11:33:00 AM

Loved all the images.... lI felt like I was there with you!

Stephan McBride

Date: 7/18/2023 8:44:00 AM

Beautiful picture and poem, dwelling in the beauty of God's creation

Vijay Pandit

Date: 7/18/2023 4:46:00 AM

Sounds a like a journey to remember. Those flowers were emblematic of oasis in the desert. Best to you, Valsa.

Daisy Meadows

Date: 7/18/2023 12:13:00 AM

A beautiful description of the desert. Lovely poem. Well written.

Speaks Volumes

Date: 7/17/2023 9:51:00 PM

Here in Australia we have deserts with Camels roaming wild. ( Not belled). I always planned to go there in winter when not oppressively hot, But never made it. Your wonderful poem just took me there Well done Valsa. A wonderful trip had. Thank you.