Awakening Darkness Escapes Into Shadows

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unrhymed tercets

Turning salt mixes within the desert sand fired clay dipped inside a deeply moulded shell from the blood flowing straight into feathers A wing speaks from four chambers as an echo holds a silent moment paused touching oceans mist A sky burns red as the sun dips down dawning twilight Faraway distant murmurs through the heart's beat whispers carried upon the winds that change tune one thousand memories captured in the grey clouds

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M. L. Kiser

Date: 10/1/2018 7:03:00 AM

"A wing speaks from four chambers as an echo holds a silent moment paused touching oceans mist A sky burns red as the sun dips down dawning twilight"; beautiful imagery here; I see even more potential in this poem; you must add more, eventually and repost! Well done.

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 9/20/2018 1:57:00 PM

Hello Liam, I can picture the clouds as i read this poem.The last verse is the verse I like the best. Have a nice day my friend.

Gary Bateman

Date: 9/19/2018 2:57:00 PM

Hello Liam Mate!! Most Excellent work here. Full of wondrous imagery and metaphoric meaning. Very well-done!! Cheers and Best, Gary

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/4/2018 4:41:00 PM

A charming poem you wrote, Liam..well done, indeed!

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 9/4/2018 2:05:00 PM

Hi Liam!:))Wow!This is the most very beautiful romantic tender sweet n' captivating love poem you've penned here my dearest friend Liam.Just dazzling!All so very beautifully written.Just awesome!Another very beautiful,sparkling diamond from your very golden glowing pen.I love it!A most very beautiful heartfelt romantic dreamy heart melting away enchanting love poem to be held very close to my heart.smiling.This is so very beautiful n' sweet! Just wonderful!I truly enjoy it!A true glowing golden gem.Your pen is truly mighty golden!A 7 + + + + +!A Fav!To me you're always the best in everything Liam.So very beautiful romantic gentle and sweet.I really hope n' pray alot you're okay in everything, Liam.Please keep positive.Always keeping you in my thoughts n' prayers.Keep your faith!Keep your love hopes n' follow your dreams always too:))Wishing you a very lovely week!In His light God bless you always!:))Love n' hugs!xoxox D.^O^