Awaiting Visual

awaiting visual 
color bursts across the night
red and gold glorious

For the Fireworks contest in the Haiku form.
Written for Deborha Guzzi
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Cole Avatar
July 5, 2010 at 7:50 AM
i really like this doris xx
Guzzi Avatar
July 2, 2010 at 12:25 PM
You have soup mail my friend!
Watts Avatar
July 1, 2010 at 7:17 AM
You describe this perfectly. Very well executed here. Thank you for your warm welcome as well.
Mehta Avatar
July 1, 2010 at 4:10 AM
A wonderful entry in the contest. Good luck, Doris
Kendrick Avatar
July 1, 2010 at 4:06 AM
Reads like a winner for it describes the actions and energy of the firework show...Good luck with this great one....Mom
Cole Avatar
July 1, 2010 at 3:51 AM
very nice
Sweetheart Avatar
June 30, 2010 at 9:18 PM
My boyfriend, Ron, has a business partner who has a private jet who flew us down (16 hours) and will take us home .. but I wanna stay.. so I am thinking of planting myself in one of these mosaic flower pots ..or terrariums.. and not be found....I was antsy coming down but now I have my new phone and laptops to play with and photos to look at so hopefully it won't be a long flight back.. if they find me to take home.haha..
Delacroix Avatar
June 30, 2010 at 9:18 PM
LOL! Very nice! Sounds gorgeous. Great Haiku, Doris. Thanks for sharing. Caroline.
Dietrich Avatar
June 30, 2010 at 8:59 PM
This sizzles!! Luv, Andrea
Neels Avatar
June 30, 2010 at 8:56 PM
Awesome Doris, best wishes with the contest, luv Wilma
Sweetheart Avatar
June 30, 2010 at 8:52 PM
Yes .. I feel it.. I hear it .. the sound effects make the Haiku Doris.. good luck.. a winner for sure.. with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii.. ..good luck.. to ya...
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