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Autumns Birth

Born on an autumn's day 

Blue skies and butterflies

Leaves falling to the ground  

Hold me under water 

Teach me how to pray

Then I'll be on my way

As I lay here in my grave

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Sean L Sanders

July 9, 2013 at 3:00 PM

I love the metaphoric writing in this poem nicely done poet

Debbie Duncan

July 9, 2013 at 4:07 PM

Thank you Sean ;}

Duke Beaufort

July 6, 2013 at 6:16 AM

Debbie, thank you for your comment. I know that you are truthful--it is the politicians who are dishonest. Your poem above fooled me at first. I thought it might be about earthworms until I came to the last line. This twist in short verse takes an educational turn. It is tough to think about our demise, but you bring it forward in a beautiful way that puts life in a natural perspective. We can only hope that our offspring with thrive at least for a while without us.

Debbie Duncan

July 7, 2013 at 4:45 AM

Thank you Duke ;}

Phyllis Babcock

July 5, 2013 at 6:49 PM

The season's come and go.Each is born and then each dies only to become the circle of life. Nicely done. love phyl

Debbie Duncan

July 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM

Thank you phyl ;}

Tim Ryerson

June 30, 2013 at 5:55 PM

'Teach me how to pray' indeed Debbie!...VERY nice verse - Tim

Debbie Duncan

June 30, 2013 at 9:09 PM

Thank you Tim ;}

Sara Kendrick

June 30, 2013 at 5:31 PM

Autumn can birth some great things in our lives that Spring and Summer could not give..Winter has its own rewards..Enjoyed reading your very creative and unique work.Sara

Joseph May

June 30, 2013 at 7:59 AM

As one season dies another is born ...nicely penned Debbie....thanks for stopping by

Karen Anglesey

June 29, 2013 at 4:08 PM

Debbie, picturing birth, baptism and death in an elegant setting . So serene!

Debbie Duncan

June 29, 2013 at 5:28 PM

Thank you Karen ;}

Andrea Dietrich

June 28, 2013 at 1:29 AM

this is very nice. I really like it!

Debbie Duncan

June 28, 2013 at 1:22 PM

Thank Andrea ;}

Don Johnson

June 26, 2013 at 5:58 PM

birth and death revolving on the wheel, how soon the time is passing quick, so passionate we dance the reel, cos death does come again to steal, time & again to cross, recross the styx.... unreal...deal ...betwixt... again the spirit deal.. till babe in arms returns, the wheel is fixed. Don re: Debbie Duncan "Autumns Birth"