David O'Haolin Whalen Poet Rhyme

Autumn Dawn

Light congealing
Like ice upon water
Razor-honed edge 
of dawn cleaving the dark

In hot pursuit 
Of shadows fleeing
Dreams drift away…
Like a guttering spark

Liquid gold blades 
of sabre-like rays
Cleaving and piercing
Heart of morning mist

Parting a path 
for a new-born day
Hapless…Nay, helpless!
Of night to resist

Dawn’s dam of darkness
So sorely breached
Erodes into shards  of bones  
white…and bleached
 
Floods of light gouting
As through broken dike
Awash are farms, fields 
And sheepfolds alike

Shredding the shrouds
Of nighttime’s dark clouds
What is there of Dawn 
…not to like?…

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Robert Pettit September 5, 2012 at 9:22 PM Great descriptiveness and rhyming in this piece.

Joann Grisetti September 5, 2012 at 3:04 PM Some days dawn just creeps up silent, but others it really pushes forth as you have described. Great write.

Cindy Cayton September 2, 2012 at 3:12 AM so very well written. An enjoyable morning read early this morning. Don't let your ink dry :) Cindy Lu David O'Haolin Whalen September 2, 2012 at 6:53 PM Thanks Cindy. I'm glad I helped make your morning a little more enjoyable. Appreciate your time and comments.

Stephen Parker August 31, 2012 at 8:18 PM A brilliant write. You sear the receding shadows with a resplendant light! I loved the third stanza. It was scintillating! Stanza five is also palpitating! I look forward to reading more of your poems. If this for the Autumn Splendor contest, it cannot be beat! David O'Haolin Whalen September 2, 2012 at 7:01 PM Thanks Stephen, for a comment that's almost more poetic than my poem! I like this one too, which means that it won't get many hits. That seems to be the way it works for me. What I like, most other people don't! Thanks again for you time and very kind comments.