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Autum Stroll

Crisp crunch
Musical feet
Wind whistles, musty beat
Swirling and rustling of the leaves
Golden

Rustic
Falling to ground
More notes to make the sound
Feet sample tunes as we stroll
Trees mime

Copyright © Laura Hay | Year Posted 2015

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Smita Kulkarni Date: 8/7/2019 10:35:00 PM Short and sweet but very unique Laura! -Smita Login to Reply

Eric Ashford Date: 8/4/2019 3:05:00 PM Nice Fall poem. Tactile musical tones throughout. Well done. Login to Reply

Sarban Bhattacharya Date: 9/17/2016 9:25:00 AM A nice portrayal of relationship between man and nature, Laura. Login to Reply Laura Hay Date: 9/20/2016 4:55:00 AM Thank you for stopping by Sarban and for your kind feedback. Warm regards, Laura.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 1/25/2016 3:59:00 PM this is REALLY creative work. One of the best little poems I read this afternoon!! Login to Reply Laura Hay Date: 1/29/2016 4:10:00 AM Thank you so much Andrea, i've not done anything lately, i've still got a few i could share, i need more time, work and home live is hectic just now! x

Sara Kendrick Date: 11/5/2015 11:32:00 AM Enjoyed reading your creative and expressive work..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Thanks for stopping by..Your comments were uplifting,,Sara Login to Reply Laura Hay Date: 11/6/2015 12:06:00 PM Thanks for stopping to read this Sara, i'm happy that you enjoyed this, warm regards, Laura.

Skat A Date: 10/29/2015 9:10:00 PM Laura, Congratulations on your "Autumn Stroll win." Love SKAT Login to Reply Laura Hay Date: 11/1/2015 3:02:00 PM Thank you for taking the time to drop by SKAT! Much appreciated, Kind Regards, Laura.

Kim Merryman Date: 10/29/2015 1:23:00 PM I like the way you incorporated rhyme in your cinquain, Laura! Great rhythm! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim Login to Reply Laura Hay Date: 11/1/2015 3:00:00 PM Thank you for dropping by Kim and for your kind comments, much appreciated, kind regards, Laura.

James Inman Date: 10/27/2015 10:22:00 AM Nicely written Laura, lovely poem. Login to Reply Laura Hay Date: 11/1/2015 3:00:00 PM Thank you very much James ;)

Emile Pinet Date: 10/26/2015 6:43:00 PM The words are magical and beautifully expressed in a sea of swirling phrases that dance upon the tongue. Emile. Login to Reply Laura Hay Date: 11/1/2015 3:00:00 PM Thank you for your support Emile, much appreciated, kind regards, Laura.

Paul Callus Date: 10/24/2015 5:28:00 PM Very beautiful, Laura...sound and sight being the main ingredients. An autumn stroll becomes a musical poem. Well done! ~ Warm regards // paul Login to Reply Laura Hay Date: 11/1/2015 2:59:00 PM Thank you for both your encouraging comments Paul! I'm shocked i managed to get a place on both my recent contest entries, warm regards, Laura. Paul Callus Date: 10/27/2015 2:40:00 PM ..and back again with merited congratulations!! A most worthy win, Laura:) ~ Regards // paul

Laura Leiser Date: 10/23/2015 11:45:00 PM I love how you weave the senses into your poem, Laura! I definitely hear the crunching of the leaves :) Good luck in the contest from another Laura! Login to Reply Laura Hay Date: 10/24/2015 4:26:00 AM Thank you for your kind comments Laura!! Warm rgds :)

Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/23/2015 9:12:00 PM very nice, Laura! Login to Reply Laura Hay Date: 10/24/2015 4:25:00 AM Thank you!! :)

Jan Allison Date: 10/23/2015 2:36:00 PM beautifully penned Laura I can almost hear the crunch of the leaves with every footstep - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Laura Hay Date: 10/23/2015 2:49:00 PM Thank you very much Jan, your comments are much appreciated, warm regards Laura :)