August Skies

If you look backwards in time
you might see us

It was August
too many summers ago to recall
long after midnight
my brother and I
slipping through the valley of sleep
crawling out the window
onto the roof of the old sun-porch
drinking in excitement of the fresh night air
sprawled on a coarse gravel bed
searching the starry night
and watching for the first time
as the sky fell apart

then waiting for the world to end
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Beck Avatar
August 24, 2012 at 11:49 AM
this is good....nice tale of chicken licken philosophy....accurate portrayal of childrens minds...your low placing in the contest is grossly incorrect.....you should be at least a dozen places higher up the list.....best wishes Syd
Kendrick Avatar
August 23, 2012 at 2:47 PM
Congrats on your winning work with this very unique work..Sara
Guzzi Avatar
August 22, 2012 at 6:18 PM
First thing I thought was the movie War of the Worlds...BIG HUGS & Congrad's on this winning write. Light & love
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
August 21, 2012 at 11:34 AM
Many congratulations on your win Carrie xx
Brown Avatar
August 21, 2012 at 5:59 AM
Congratulations on your win in Tirzah's "Shooting Stars" contest Carrie. Love, Carol
Williams Avatar
August 21, 2012 at 3:40 AM
Carrie big congrats on your win...David
Arowolo Avatar
August 20, 2012 at 11:56 PM
Nice and Lovely Narrative,Carrie...Great work..Congrats on your win...
Conway Avatar
August 20, 2012 at 2:11 PM
Beautiful image of your first shooting stars! Congrats on your 14th place finish in my contest!~Tirzah~
Collins Avatar
August 4, 2012 at 7:29 AM
Dear Carrie - Another scene of sentiment so sweet it brings a tear to my eye. love, Kathy
Dietrich Avatar
July 28, 2012 at 6:33 PM
AWESOME way to look at the end of day . I would have enjoyed having a brother to do this with. I had all sisters and we just giggled all night in our beds! My grandkids got to see the barn swallows last night when they came over. they enjoyed it. I saw your tear poem did not make it into the winner list either. I do not understand that. Your entry was magnificent.
Bauer Avatar
July 27, 2012 at 7:51 AM
charming and so reminiscent of the innocence of childhood! great poem!
Williams Avatar
July 27, 2012 at 1:10 AM
Carrie, you paint a nice picture here of your youth, hope the world doesn't end before I go to a garden party...David
O'Haolin Whalen Avatar
July 26, 2012 at 7:31 PM
Only the second poem of yours that I've read and both are excellent! You've become a member in my favorite free verse writers club. I only have 5 writers of this genre in my select group: they're all women, and one is on this site. Her name is Raskin Bobbins, and you two brighten up this site immensely! I don't comment often, but when I do it's well deserved.
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