August 23rd

" I remember that day
As clear as the crystal springs in June"
only it wasn't June, It was August
the morning air was thick like smoke
it choked me awake

the first blush of day
flushed across the sky
blood red clouds 
colored her path

I lay still
like the air
without a hint
of summer's wind

the clock on the wall
tormented me 
with the tick, tock,
tick, tock,
its bony hands
seemed to skip along
until I arose from bed

I sipped on coffee
as I took in the news
unsure what my day would bring

...and then I could hear a buzz
as if a fly was making circles
beside the bed, then a ring, ring, 
ring echoed within my purse

I stared at the clock
my heart began to beat
faster then time

was it my father
did something happen
I worried as I listened

the voice
was indistinct
as if being choked

I struggled
with my ears
to make sense
of the words
that fell

...and then silence
fell all around
as if deaf
and mute
unable to process
and conceive
the message

my brother,
who turned 49
just the day before
was breathless
like the august wind

no more jokes
or laughter
or candles atop cake

his wick had burned out
within that last breath of air
and it burns, slow
as the years pass
still to this day
yet I'll remember that day
forever more....



pick a line contest
Mustapha Mohammed
"Reflections when the summer breathes"

Sandy Adams  8-22-2013
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 9/18/2013 2:02:00 PM
well deserved win............ luv ~SKAT~
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Date: 9/14/2013 6:23:00 PM
Congrad's on your win! Light & Love
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Date: 9/14/2013 9:13:00 AM
a very moving write Sandra....congrats on your win
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Date: 9/13/2013 8:22:00 PM
Sandra, --A beautiful poem and line... congratulations :-)...xox~ LINDA
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/14/2013 7:00:00 AM
Thank you Linda...I read his poem and that line jumped out at me...had no idea where my muse was going to take me....have a great weekend! Hugs
Date: 9/13/2013 12:25:00 PM
Wow......what a heart-felt poem, it takes the breath away. An honor to share this spot with you, Sandy. Congratulations. :)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/14/2013 6:58:00 AM
Thank you so much Carrie...I am honored to have my poem stand with yours....hugs :)
Date: 9/13/2013 10:30:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning place Sandra xx
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/14/2013 6:56:00 AM
Thank you Mandy ...hugs
Date: 9/13/2013 8:43:00 AM
Congrats on the first place win, Sandra
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/14/2013 6:56:00 AM
Thank you so much :)
Date: 9/13/2013 8:13:00 AM
I was moved the first time I read this one. Your words are exceptional! Thanks for entering my contest. Congratulations.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/16/2013 8:44:00 PM
It was my honor to have you enter this piece. This day holds significance for me as well, my step dad passed away two years ago on August 23rd.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/14/2013 6:50:00 AM
Wow thank you Rick for feeling my poem was worthy of a first place win...and thank you for hosting the contest! Have a great weekend! Hugs :)
Date: 9/13/2013 7:04:00 AM
hi Sandy an outstanding poem of great sadness. congrats on win Shadow x smile
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/14/2013 6:55:00 AM
Thank you so much Shadow....have a great weekend! hugs
Date: 8/23/2013 9:28:00 PM
Such a moving and bittersweet sentiment. This tugs at the heartstrings while expressing the loss of your brother ... I imagine it must be one of the most difficult things to process... :)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/14/2013 6:55:00 AM
Thank you Karen...my sister and I are the only ones left in "our family" now..so much death around us in our life that you kind of become numb... Have a great weekend!
Date: 8/23/2013 3:05:00 PM
Hi Sandra, A moving and heartfelt composition...Well penned... Regards, Ken...
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/14/2013 6:51:00 AM
thank you for your kind comment Ken :)
Date: 8/23/2013 12:22:00 PM
Creative work that you have penned...Reads like winners' list to me..Enjoyed reading this one today...Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Sandra Adams
Date: 8/23/2013 12:29:00 PM
thank you Sara...this one has much deep rooted meaning for me...yesterday was my brother;s birthday, today the day he died, but also my mom-mom's bday and the day my mother thought she was going to pass! Have a great Friday...hugs
Date: 8/23/2013 8:29:00 AM
An emotive and moving piece Sandra. Enjoyed this one from you.
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Mustapha Mohammed
Date: 8/23/2013 1:49:00 PM
Yes I saw it. Glad you liked that line...xoxo
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Sandra Adams
Date: 8/23/2013 10:19:00 AM
thank you very much...if you noticed the opening line came from your beautiful poem :)
Date: 8/22/2013 8:47:00 PM
Raw ....real..healing ...life...write on! Sandra! jimbo
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Sandra Adams
Date: 8/22/2013 8:52:00 PM
Thank you Jim...writing is good therapy in my opinion* Have a great night :)
Date: 8/22/2013 8:09:00 PM
This is to impactful not to comment. You moved me with your words. My emotions are caught in my throat.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 8/22/2013 8:25:00 PM
thank you...this time of year is a little rough...i'll have to share this date and why it has such power...sometimes it's the emotions that control the muse :) Hugs
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