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Had a thought a moment ago, just before I broke your aura'd wing, trapped here, forever, within Audouin's vast crater alone and pining. Starved for ages, a new gnawing hunger'd vision looked to bring., had we met, you and I, before the javelin started skyward climbing? Though skin is rough and jagged as scoria litter that surrounded, there beats a heart recognized by all the vanquished ghosts of Mars. Was this love, don't know..,tho' never felt quite so astounded. Perhaps startled to realize, it was I..,snared by her eyes in fawning stars. Pitiful, mortal creatures molded by divine hands such as we, learn only now, the cosmos proves bearable only through love. And so I'll starve tonight, and tomorrow, and perhaps forever be., though joyous still..,no longer alone, or taunted by constellations above. At last you take wing again, watch you soar away into the starlit night, this day found love to save, and let your spirit go in merciful flight.
~~My apologies to Carl Sagan~~

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Date: 4/25/2020 5:37:00 AM
mortal creatures molded by divine hands the story of every life, truly well done.
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Date: 5/4/2020 11:16:00 PM
DM, Thank you for the comment. Life can find us indignant at our meager lives. Humbled by the smallest things. But this is where we learn to love. -Richard
Date: 4/11/2020 10:49:00 PM
The touching song went perfectly well with your beautiful verse, Richard. Amazing rendition. Happy Easter. :)
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Date: 4/12/2020 4:49:00 PM
Hello Evelyn, Thank you for saying so. The song was sort of meant as a throwback to the Golden Age of the Silver Screen when the credits rolled at the end of the picture show. Happy Easter. -Richard
Date: 4/9/2020 9:34:00 AM
Your talent shines, Quoth.. Your write is an exquisite masterpiece! I just didn't want it to end, my friend.. Enjoyed this gem! Going into my faves! Blessings and stay safe..
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Date: 4/10/2020 9:49:00 AM
Robertina, Thank you. thank you..worth saying once, worth saying twice. -Richard
Date: 4/5/2020 1:17:00 PM
This is beautiful, Richard; an excellent example of how prose poetry can be expressed. I can see it being snapped up by an astronomy journal or anthology. Regards // paul
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Date: 4/10/2020 9:48:00 AM
Good morning Paul. Thanks for the comment. I was glad to hear from our own dear poet friend Heidi this morning. Please keep her in your thoughts and prayers. -Richard
Date: 3/21/2020 11:21:00 AM
Richard, your poem is lovely, well written _Constance
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Date: 3/22/2020 1:08:00 PM
Thank you for that Constance. This missive of hope tries to show the importance of self sacrifice. With a little hope, and prayers, maybe others won't have to sacrifice all they have on this Earth. -Richard
Date: 3/20/2020 9:16:00 PM
Beautiful , especially at the end. Really loved this phrasing: snared by her eye's in fawning stars
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Date: 3/22/2020 1:02:00 PM
Andrea, Thank you for your comment. I'm thankful to wake to another bright Spring Sunday with good coffee & better poetry. I hope today is good to you too. Oh, and I'm plumb tickled that my job is critical to the Commonwealth. -Richard
Date: 3/15/2020 1:25:00 PM
There's lots of talented poets out there and looks like you are one. Best to you in your endeavors
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Date: 3/15/2020 9:37:00 PM
Clay, Thank you for that comment and well-wishes. Poetry is so subjective. Most people like what they like and don't know why. I am one of the those too. Oh yeah, I really liked your poem 'Time and eternity'. I almost forgot that. -Richard
Date: 3/15/2020 6:19:00 AM
A masterful profound writing filled with knowledge and love dearest, Richard.
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Date: 3/15/2020 9:24:00 PM
Demetrios, Thank you for reading and commenting today. Fitting to show mercy to another individual for selfish want of another's company? -Richard
Date: 3/15/2020 2:59:00 AM
Richard, Richard... A stunningly beautiful poem that shows Not only your intelligence, but your soul. Should be a POTD. In my book, inscribed as a FAV,
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Date: 3/15/2020 9:16:00 PM
Thank you for stopping by, and big thanks for the FAV. I used quotes from CS as inspiration. "For small creatures such as we the vastness is bearable only through love." -Carl Sagan
Date: 3/14/2020 8:22:00 PM
A delicate missive that exudes love and ties in the cosmos in a graceful way.
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Date: 3/15/2020 9:12:00 PM
Thank you for commenting Caren. Poem named in honor of Audouin Dollfus. The Dollfus crater, at 363 km in diameter, is one of the largest craters on the planet Mars. American astronomer Carl Sagan also has a crater named in his honor. -Richard