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New-Ku
Invented by Charles Messina. A rhyming haiku with two stanzas.
The first has a syllable count of 4,3,3,3,3,3,3,4 and the second has a syllable count of 8,6,6,6,6,6,6,8. Each stanza must also have a rhyming pattern.

a setting sun ends its run daylight's done darkness won night's begun everyone but my son leaves one by one gazing up at night’s starry skies through a five-year-old's eyes he starts to fantasize for stars look like fireflies and watching the moon rise triggers audible sighs but as things normalize shooting stars add to his surprise. (new-ku) 08/27/2022 Charlie New-Ku Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Charles Messina monorhyme

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/20/2022 6:25:00 AM

Ahhh!! A shooting star! I have only seen two that I can remember in my lifetime so that had to be a thrill. Way to go with this winner. Congratulations. Sara

Emile Pinet
Date: 10/20/2022 8:14:00 AM

Thanks, Sara, shooting stars are always a thrill to see, I welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 10/19/2022 1:54:00 PM

Ahhh, this is just lovely Emile! Congratulations on your win!

Emile Pinet
Date: 10/19/2022 2:00:00 PM

Thanks, Linda, I welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.

Christuraj Alex

Date: 10/19/2022 2:38:00 AM

"five-year-old's eyes" has true nature feast. Beautifully written. Congratulations!

Emile Pinet
Date: 10/19/2022 7:49:00 AM

Thanks, Christuraj, I appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.

Charles Messina

Date: 10/18/2022 2:57:00 PM

Just wonderful, Emile. You aced this form my friend. Delightful in every aspect! Congratulations on your 1st place win! Charlie

Emile Pinet
Date: 10/19/2022 7:48:00 AM

Thanks, Charlie, I appreciate the placement and your comments my friend, Emile.

L Milton Hankins

Date: 8/27/2022 11:27:00 AM

Emile...I simply do not know how you come up with these superb pieces when responding to a contest. This is absolutely superb, and I know we'll see it at or near the top! Your choice of the monorhyme was excellent.

Emile Pinet
Date: 8/28/2022 8:20:00 AM

Thanks, Milt, you always manage to bring a smile to my day, my friend, Emile.

Jenna Logan

Date: 8/27/2022 10:12:00 AM

Terrific use of Charlie's form, Emile, and the story line is great.

Emile Pinet
Date: 8/27/2022 10:16:00 AM

Thanks, Jenna, I appreciate and welcome your comments my friend, Emile.